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Prescription pills changed my destiny
You swallowed one
just for fun,
You swallowed two
because you were blue,
You swallowed three
and blamed it on me,
You swallowed four
to settle the score,
You swallowed five
and thought you were still alive,
You swallowed six
now you need your daily fix,
You swallowed seven
swearing it was heaven,
You swallowed eight
thinking it was fate,
You swallowed nine
that's when you ceased being mine,
You swallowed 10
and that was your end,
all because you swallowed one
just for fun, or two because you were blue,
I'm left alone, empty and lost without you.
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Re: Prescription pills changed my destiny
1st Jun 2012 7:54pm
Sad and a great poem of loss. Like I said in my other comment you write like I do. There is passion and feeling conveyed through your words. Great job.
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re: Re: Prescription pills changed my destiny
1st Jun 2012 8:03pm
thank you!!! i'm reading your stuff now and dare i say love them!!! you are a talented writer/poet!!!
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1st Jun 2012 8:21pm
Thank you that is a great compliment. I am glad you are enjoying them. I look forward to reading more from you as well. So far I have loved ones you have put on here thus far.
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Re: Prescription pills changed my destiny
11th Jun 2012 9:36pm
thanks, i appreciate that thanks for reading!!
watching someone do this is to themselves is hard........
watching someone do this is to themselves is hard........
Re: Prescription pills changed my destiny
12th Dec 2012 10:02pm
Heavy duty Nikki !!!!
But ... the 1 to 10 countdown is a very clever way of depicting the descent to either what was the physical death, or, the visualization of it, from the observers view ....
Hmmmm ... ???
Annnd .... as for your "Natural", comment ....
I give that a MASSIVE thumbs up !!!
One.
Virge
But ... the 1 to 10 countdown is a very clever way of depicting the descent to either what was the physical death, or, the visualization of it, from the observers view ....
Hmmmm ... ???
Annnd .... as for your "Natural", comment ....
I give that a MASSIVE thumbs up !!!
One.
Virge
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12th Dec 2012 10:04pm
Re. Prescription pills changed my destiny
9th Feb 2019 11:25pm
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9th Feb 2019 11:28pm
Thank you for reading. This was my first poem on this sight. I havent read this in years. I can still feel what made me write this.
Re: Re. Prescription pills changed my destiny
9th Feb 2019 11:30pm
Yes I often read poets first posts as i find most pick that first poem particularly and also gives a starting point ... This is not only felt but a great write ... Bless and love
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11th May 2019 8:04pm
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Re: Re. Prescription pills changed my destiny
13th May 2019 1:07am
Thank you! I have been writing since I was a kid my mom bought me a type writer when I was 10 i started and haven't let up I have 10million ideas and they wont stop. I guess its like automatic writing. I collect antique photography and i think 90% of my ideas are born from the faces I see in those old things. Some of the things I write Ive experienced but most I can honestly say are just felt from afar. Again thank you.
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