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lightning
Lightning cut through
the grey gloom of the day
like CPR for the soul
...
He said
the flash was God taking photos
She said
that's something her mother would say
I said
she's not poetic enough for that
...
The light was so bright
it lit up my room
through the black out curtains
slapping me back
from the edge of sleep
...
I expect to dream
in electricity
the grey gloom of the day
like CPR for the soul
...
He said
the flash was God taking photos
She said
that's something her mother would say
I said
she's not poetic enough for that
...
The light was so bright
it lit up my room
through the black out curtains
slapping me back
from the edge of sleep
...
I expect to dream
in electricity
Published 12th Apr 2025
Author's Note
small observations on a stormy day
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12th Apr 2025 7:12pm
Sounds a fun way to interpret lightning flashes for children:
He said
the flash was God taking photos
She said
that's something her mother would say
He said
the flash was God taking photos
She said
that's something her mother would say
14th Apr 2025 2:03am
13th Apr 2025 2:35am
God Indie.
"Lightning cut through
the grey gloom of the day
like CPR for the soul
"I expect to dream
in electricity"
Brining the narrator's soul back to life, and something the narrator will dream of.
AAAAAAA!!!!!
The shockey-thingy that brings the narrators SOUL back to LIFE is something the narrator will DREAM of....
That's brilliant.
This is such a fucking kickass piece.
"Lightning cut through
the grey gloom of the day
like CPR for the soul
"I expect to dream
in electricity"
Brining the narrator's soul back to life, and something the narrator will dream of.
AAAAAAA!!!!!
The shockey-thingy that brings the narrators SOUL back to LIFE is something the narrator will DREAM of....
That's brilliant.
This is such a fucking kickass piece.
14th Apr 2025 2:06am
I love how electrically you love this piece. ⚡
Me being the awesome dumbass I am, didn't even see the cyclic nature of it til you pointed it out, and I wrote it, lol, so thank you.
Me being the awesome dumbass I am, didn't even see the cyclic nature of it til you pointed it out, and I wrote it, lol, so thank you.
13th Apr 2025 11:16pm
Awesome.
Especially the beginning lines. It pulls the reader in rapidly.
Your writes are always worth more time than it takes to read them. You could carry a longer story easily.
Especially the beginning lines. It pulls the reader in rapidly.
Your writes are always worth more time than it takes to read them. You could carry a longer story easily.
14th Apr 2025 2:09am
Thank you 😊. I did think it could lend itself to something more in-depth. This was one of those ideas that refused to let me sleep until I got up and wrote it down. I was thoroughly annoyed at my brain at the time, but I think it was worth it.
