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My tongue is tapping the roof of my mouth
Seeing daylight
peaking through
the little crack
in your window
us, laying like
marble statues
sealed in small
time frames
as other peoples
faces mould into
the same old
questions
over and over,
our lips refuse
parting unless
they're about
to meet one
another in
the middle
again.
Published 22nd Mar 2025
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22nd Mar 2025 11:57pm
… despite what some bellend said…
I looked at the brief, then looked at this poem and used my brain a little. I mean imagine that.
Those opening window lines reminded me of portholes. Then followed by the marble statues image really gave the thought this feeling of eternity - tombstones, how they are the physical thing left to remember us by. I wondered if our poems themselves were marble statues waiting to be left behind.
The “our lips refuse parting” stanza lends itself to an idea of what’s said has already been said - there is nothing more to say, echoed in the same old questions above.
Overall, this paints a picture of nonchalant quietude. Some people want to leave DU with rapture on their lips. Some, recognise there is nothing more to say that will change a thing from all the years here.
I liked this. It’s quite the metaphor, but meaningful.
Thanks for sharing you with us.
-M
I looked at the brief, then looked at this poem and used my brain a little. I mean imagine that.
Those opening window lines reminded me of portholes. Then followed by the marble statues image really gave the thought this feeling of eternity - tombstones, how they are the physical thing left to remember us by. I wondered if our poems themselves were marble statues waiting to be left behind.
The “our lips refuse parting” stanza lends itself to an idea of what’s said has already been said - there is nothing more to say, echoed in the same old questions above.
Overall, this paints a picture of nonchalant quietude. Some people want to leave DU with rapture on their lips. Some, recognise there is nothing more to say that will change a thing from all the years here.
I liked this. It’s quite the metaphor, but meaningful.
Thanks for sharing you with us.
-M
