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Obliteration Heartache
Obliteration heartache occurs
Nestled in the cocoon of your limber arms.
And ferocious creeping fingers.
Clouds obscure the moon.
Our time is soon.
You are quiet but ravenous.
My heartache was the lonely scavenger.
You sweetly stalk my night,
infiltrate my hidden chambers.
Blood stained with heartache's remains.
You obliterate the pain, the regret, the longing streaks of red blood.
Obliteration heartache occurs in the electricity that your eyes flood. .
Nestled in the cocoon of your limber arms.
And ferocious creeping fingers.
Clouds obscure the moon.
Our time is soon.
You are quiet but ravenous.
My heartache was the lonely scavenger.
You sweetly stalk my night,
infiltrate my hidden chambers.
Blood stained with heartache's remains.
You obliterate the pain, the regret, the longing streaks of red blood.
Obliteration heartache occurs in the electricity that your eyes flood. .
Published 19th Feb 2025
Author's Note
I've been on hiatus. Be gentle. 😊
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19th Feb 2025 00:48am
Ok Debbie, I'll be gentle.....This is fucking greatttttttttt! As always, your writing always shines. You can write anything. Long hiatus or not, you always have a way with words and poetry. Welcome back!!!
19th Feb 2025 2:15am
I take fucking great as a good compliment, lol
So thank you. I thought it needed a little more pizazz.
So thank you. I thought it needed a little more pizazz.
19th Feb 2025 2:18am
19th Feb 2025 2:44am
Funny you say that I've been in the most negative state of mind due to my
Moms dementia. I think I write to spread myself with some positivity.
Thank you for reading.
Moms dementia. I think I write to spread myself with some positivity.
Thank you for reading.
19th Feb 2025 2:53am
Beautifully penned, Debbie. Into the list it belongs. No signs of being rusty here, my friend. Always dig your imagery, a great read. Appreciate you.
Damian
Damian
19th Feb 2025 4:11am
Thank you so much. Y'all give me the confidence I need. And I appreciate you!
19th Feb 2025 3:24am
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Yesterday 7:20am
Very expressive and clear. Your willingness to be disposed takes form here. It's like you're crying out to be understood in a dark world where there is only longing and heartache. You desire the night to engulf your spirit to find this romance, despite the environment, which leaves you emotionally vulnerasble. A surrender to the unknown horizon of peace, as you search. Hopefully, there is a beacon of light in transition, heh. Good job!
Yesterday 1:01pm
With the obliteration of heartache, does come s beacon of light. You understood the poem really
well, Thank you for your detailed feedback, I always look forward to.
well, Thank you for your detailed feedback, I always look forward to.
