Moments don't deserve to end

How do you do it?with such few words you take the mind to various places,filling it with numerous questions.I really enjoy your style

It's so encouraging to receive such feedback! I really appreciate it :)

As usual this one too is brilliant...However, I may suggest you to put exclamatory symbol after the first and the second sentence.

thanks for the suggestion but i don't know whether an exclamation mark would be appropriate... I need some more opinions on the matter i suppose.

Very intriguing and creative write..fcxx

thanks a lot firecracker :)

LOVE it.

Have you considered switching the "idealized" and "end" to see if it might kick in the 'nads more?

(NOT that it needs anymore anything. Just a creative suggestion. This reads FABULOUS as is)

Awesome stuff!
Betty

im thrilled! Betty you're such a wonderful writer yourself and it's such an honour to receive such a lovely feedback from you!
I'll give it a thought about the suggestion!

You know, this picked at my brain for a bit, and I came back and I'm like... I just totally made a suggestion that made... no... sense.

What I meant was: Moments don't deserve to end... which is in exact conflict with your opening. (Always cool). My thought was they 'do' deserve to be idealized? I think that was my thought.

Either way, I love minimalism, and this poem is awesome. (And hey, thanks for the nice words.)

thank god it wasn't just me! i was reading the poem again having your suggestion in mind and it didn't make sense, it didn't fit right.
I know moments should be idealised, I wrote this poem in a moment of disappointment at my self mostly.
Im so glad you liked it. I really am!

Very good, consistent and logical poem.  You have superior poetical ability.  But I wonder if some moments deserve to be remembered, to honor them, like the first time a girl and I kissed, types of spiritual experience, lovely days, your own poetry, etc.  Now I don't think you have these in mind, but I'm not certain, since your poem is so short and concise.  Do you?

marcella1

no i don't have the aforementioned in mind, unfortunately.
i was thinking more on the lines of break up, death in particular.
Thank you for the lovely comment!