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Elementary Love Poem
My love is as strong as a brick
I LIKE TO THROW IT AT PEOPLE!
- Vincent, 5th grade
I LIKE TO THROW IT AT PEOPLE!
- Vincent, 5th grade
Published 15th Feb 2025
Author's Note
We're studying figurative language in my fifth grade ELA classes, and I let students have a go at using similes. I think Vincent did a great job.
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15th Feb 2025 3:28am
Dear PD,
I think Vincent did a fabulous job with it. As a matter of fact I can totally relate to Vincent’s take on the matter.
Fabulous, just fabulous. H🌷
I think Vincent did a fabulous job with it. As a matter of fact I can totally relate to Vincent’s take on the matter.
Fabulous, just fabulous. H🌷
16th Feb 2025 1:50am
I'm glad you liked it. After I told him I liked it, he started saying "Yeah, I'm dangerous!" It seemed to make him feel powerful. In reality, he is a very sweet, doe-eyed, vulnerable boy whose mother died unexpectedly when he was eight. But he seemed to enjoy his temporary fantasy, so why not. All part of the power of writing.
15th Feb 2025 4:24am
16th Feb 2025 1:51am
15th Feb 2025 10:43am
That's a great statement. Reminded me of Jethro Tull's "Thick as a brick". Cool piece.
16th Feb 2025 1:52am
Glad you enjoyed it.
Off to read the lyrics to Thick as a Brick. Haven't thought about that song in a long time.
Off to read the lyrics to Thick as a Brick. Haven't thought about that song in a long time.
16th Feb 2025 1:50am
That's hilarious and perfectly childlike. Pure, unadulterated chaos energy. I love it.
16th Feb 2025 2:59am
