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hanging cranes
You fold me into origami
glaze me over, heat me up
call me porcelain art
hang me from the ceiling
and watch me spin
in this whirlpool of love
Your heart is a blackhole
and I mistook you
for something beautiful
when you were just a cuckoo
masquerading
as something wholesome
glaze me over, heat me up
call me porcelain art
hang me from the ceiling
and watch me spin
in this whirlpool of love
Your heart is a blackhole
and I mistook you
for something beautiful
when you were just a cuckoo
masquerading
as something wholesome
Published 7th Feb 2025
Author's Note
Written for the love vs lies competition, using the words, blackhole, porcelain, origami, cuckoo, whirlpool
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7th Feb 2025 5:24am
Dear I,
I thoroughly enjoyed how you put this all together to create that side by side of how we present when bitten by the love bug of lies.
“I mistook you
for something beautiful” I especially appreciated this line. I wish you all the best in this comp. H🌷
I thoroughly enjoyed how you put this all together to create that side by side of how we present when bitten by the love bug of lies.
“I mistook you
for something beautiful” I especially appreciated this line. I wish you all the best in this comp. H🌷
7th Feb 2025 6:17am
7th Feb 2025 1:07pm
7th Feb 2025 5:00pm
Glad you felt this as a challenge worth inspiring your words Indie.. feels this had come out finely poetic n dark .. in your effective poetics xx
11th Feb 2025 9:49pm
