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He
his was
an empty verse
brought by a solitary
meaning
it was you
broken one
shining one
who showed me
my given face
returns to me
child
your sight is fading
I hold on to
each vaporizing
tone
knowing
yours is a world far brighter
deeper than all truths
now shake cosmic
snowflakes from
ardent crust
nameless one
once more lend me
this vigil shade
shake tears
from these eardrums
on this pier
I stand avian
do not mourn night
beloved dawn
winds weep
haunted hunting
swan song
kindred fire
holds no flame
copyrights © owned by Rianne 2025
all rights reserved
an empty verse
brought by a solitary
meaning
it was you
broken one
shining one
who showed me
my given face
returns to me
child
your sight is fading
I hold on to
each vaporizing
tone
knowing
yours is a world far brighter
deeper than all truths
now shake cosmic
snowflakes from
ardent crust
nameless one
once more lend me
this vigil shade
shake tears
from these eardrums
on this pier
I stand avian
do not mourn night
beloved dawn
winds weep
haunted hunting
swan song
kindred fire
holds no flame
copyrights © owned by Rianne 2025
all rights reserved
Published 26th Jan 2025
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26th Jan 2025 1:06pm
Dear A,
This felt like a wave washing over me. I stood at the precipice as one person and after the baptism of change so was I. I really enjoyed the soft and prayer-like tone of this piece. Inspiring and wonderfully written. H🌷
This felt like a wave washing over me. I stood at the precipice as one person and after the baptism of change so was I. I really enjoyed the soft and prayer-like tone of this piece. Inspiring and wonderfully written. H🌷
26th Jan 2025 5:22pm
Dear H,
You have a remarkable eye to see beyond the phrases into the depths of this piece. A telescopic eye, or a poets whiskers. Thank you for your words, much appreciation! Greetings and blessings,
Rianne
You have a remarkable eye to see beyond the phrases into the depths of this piece. A telescopic eye, or a poets whiskers. Thank you for your words, much appreciation! Greetings and blessings,
Rianne
What a beautiful and ethereal poem!
The speaker's emotions are palpable, as they express their longing for connection and transcendence, and their grief at the impermanence of life.
The final line, "kindred fire holds no flame", suggests a sense of loss and desolation, but also a sense of acceptance and surrender.
Overall, this poem is a beautiful and haunting exploration of the human experience, highlighting the power of love and connection, and the longing for transcendence and union with something greater.
The speaker's emotions are palpable, as they express their longing for connection and transcendence, and their grief at the impermanence of life.
The final line, "kindred fire holds no flame", suggests a sense of loss and desolation, but also a sense of acceptance and surrender.
Overall, this poem is a beautiful and haunting exploration of the human experience, highlighting the power of love and connection, and the longing for transcendence and union with something greater.
26th Jan 2025 5:31pm
Hello Numer90
Thank you so much for this in depth feedback and sharing your reflections about this piece. Also for the opportunity to write on the theme of intensity. I opened myself to the theme and the rest basically followed. I never know where my muses will take me to.
Greetings and blessings,
Rianne
Thank you so much for this in depth feedback and sharing your reflections about this piece. Also for the opportunity to write on the theme of intensity. I opened myself to the theme and the rest basically followed. I never know where my muses will take me to.
Greetings and blessings,
Rianne
26th Jan 2025 5:39pm
27th Jan 2025 1:55pm
It’s a cosmic elemental play in your metaphorical juxtaposition I truly adore .. that brings out the love n grits n darkness n loneliness.. yet in all the pains, there only shines the love that inspires forever this life in it’s magical continuum.. love never ends, though the flesh n life buries n births n so on .. you have yet another created a poetic classic R! light love ev dear xx
28th Jan 2025 10:25am
Your additions to my poetry make for an interlude to each piece dear Uma. I value your guiding presence and send you more love and blessings! Indeed what it comes down to in the end there is love, and only love....
xox
Rianne
xox
Rianne
29th Jan 2025 4:07am
Brilliantly penned, Rianne. Great imagery and like the wordplay, my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
Damian
29th Jan 2025 8:06am
Thank you Damian for visiting my little corner of DU. Yes its also about the word play in this one, greetings and blessings, Rianne
