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"getting poetic" (i hate the beach)
i hate the beach
but your smile is the sun that shines over my shoulders (it doesn't burn)
but your cold hands surf over mine like the tide (are you cold?)
but the bands in your braces are the jellies on the shore (you're brighter than every color you like)
but the teeth behind them are a shark's lost and found (you'd never bite)
i hate the sand, but when the shells score my feet you just put them in your pocket
i hate the sand, but you brush it off and take my hand
i hate the beach, but i love you
but your smile is the sun that shines over my shoulders (it doesn't burn)
but your cold hands surf over mine like the tide (are you cold?)
but the bands in your braces are the jellies on the shore (you're brighter than every color you like)
but the teeth behind them are a shark's lost and found (you'd never bite)
i hate the sand, but when the shells score my feet you just put them in your pocket
i hate the sand, but you brush it off and take my hand
i hate the beach, but i love you
Published 6th Jan 2025
Author's Note
written as a gift to my best friend, who continues to show me how good people can be
how good life can be. :)
"getting poetic" is a term i use a lot in my daily life. it's funny, here it's like breathing.
i suppose i do hold my breath often.
how good life can be. :)
"getting poetic" is a term i use a lot in my daily life. it's funny, here it's like breathing.
i suppose i do hold my breath often.
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6th Jan 2025 8:02am
Dear SR,
I could really appreciate the sacrifice of hating something but still enduring or fit the sake of a friendship. All the while, seeing the positives of something not necessarily at the top of the list. Your expression of love for your friend is wonderfully evident throughout the piece. It made me appreciate my friends who endure hours of shopping with me. Terrific write. H🌷
I could really appreciate the sacrifice of hating something but still enduring or fit the sake of a friendship. All the while, seeing the positives of something not necessarily at the top of the list. Your expression of love for your friend is wonderfully evident throughout the piece. It made me appreciate my friends who endure hours of shopping with me. Terrific write. H🌷
6th Jan 2025 4:43pm
awe inspiring how your words blanket the concept of emotion pertaining to love and friendship.
once more you captivate me with your depth of understanding,
using nature to convey your visions of goodness and hope.
i enjoyed the read, your write.
once more you captivate me with your depth of understanding,
using nature to convey your visions of goodness and hope.
i enjoyed the read, your write.
