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Cavernous Echoes
Cavernous echoes
Inside the chamber
Where dust gathers
Course infinity
Ethereal breath amaze
Comfort succumbs
Filthy hands
Dare to handle
Touch a soul
Death inside
Suffocated prison
Paranoia hinted walls
At the prospect
Closing in
An escape alone
Devoid of purpose
Hidden in truth
Moments recall
Universal secrets
Into the abyss
Graven gaze
Eyes deeply
Fixated hypnosis
Mood transforms
Lust tempts
Deity life transpose
Nothing to grasp
But decadence
In my presence
Summon the charade
Playful intent
Disguise therefore
Naked altruism
Spell cast demon
Justly so
Choice upon
Emotional descent
Down the spiral
Deceitful gauge
Decision to leave
Growing cold
Skeletal stature
Beneath the skin
As time passes
More is same
In my trail
Hollow footprints
Found unfulfilled
At a loss
Done in passing
Chest concave peak
Beaten muscle plow
Dig a hole
From the womb
To fetal fatality
Recumbent position
Lay to rest
Earthen return
Elemental basis
Magnetic undercurrent
Polarity pulverizing
Fluid balance
Spiritual abandonment
Seeing and hearing
No longer registered
Day turned night
In my mind
That was it
Fateful damnation
Awaken from tomb
Shadows dizzying
Spinning still
Until light engulf
Dwarfing translucence
Embraced by sun
A warm welcome
Familiar atmosphere
Respiration remembers
Sigh relief
She waited outside
The funeral pose
An innocent smile
Inoculated my disease
Torment and distress
Melted away
Like candle wax
Meeting a flame
Dancing lively
In the air
Swaying in waves
Euphoria channels
Vocal stimulus
Exchanges song
Forget no more
New chapters written
Hopes built solid
Upon dreams fathomed
Together into eternity
Inside the chamber
Where dust gathers
Course infinity
Ethereal breath amaze
Comfort succumbs
Filthy hands
Dare to handle
Touch a soul
Death inside
Suffocated prison
Paranoia hinted walls
At the prospect
Closing in
An escape alone
Devoid of purpose
Hidden in truth
Moments recall
Universal secrets
Into the abyss
Graven gaze
Eyes deeply
Fixated hypnosis
Mood transforms
Lust tempts
Deity life transpose
Nothing to grasp
But decadence
In my presence
Summon the charade
Playful intent
Disguise therefore
Naked altruism
Spell cast demon
Justly so
Choice upon
Emotional descent
Down the spiral
Deceitful gauge
Decision to leave
Growing cold
Skeletal stature
Beneath the skin
As time passes
More is same
In my trail
Hollow footprints
Found unfulfilled
At a loss
Done in passing
Chest concave peak
Beaten muscle plow
Dig a hole
From the womb
To fetal fatality
Recumbent position
Lay to rest
Earthen return
Elemental basis
Magnetic undercurrent
Polarity pulverizing
Fluid balance
Spiritual abandonment
Seeing and hearing
No longer registered
Day turned night
In my mind
That was it
Fateful damnation
Awaken from tomb
Shadows dizzying
Spinning still
Until light engulf
Dwarfing translucence
Embraced by sun
A warm welcome
Familiar atmosphere
Respiration remembers
Sigh relief
She waited outside
The funeral pose
An innocent smile
Inoculated my disease
Torment and distress
Melted away
Like candle wax
Meeting a flame
Dancing lively
In the air
Swaying in waves
Euphoria channels
Vocal stimulus
Exchanges song
Forget no more
New chapters written
Hopes built solid
Upon dreams fathomed
Together into eternity
Published 29th Dec 2024
Author's Note
Just a brief and abrupt tale of how love can save someone from extreme emotional distress and unbecoming of livelihood and animation.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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29th Dec 2024 8:15am
Hello C,
Well, what can I say about this write. Every time I wonder how on earth you manage to write these writings.
You have such distinct voice and style. It reminds me of old types of writing from historical pamphlets where often the knowledge came from the universe, from the elements, sometimes from divine beings. In the norse history it was often seen as spell binding. Though this can be seen in a poetic sense where the writer almost enters a state of trance while they are speaking directly from their sources. Sounds complicated maybe but its actually not that complicated. I think you know what I am trying to describe here. Really enjoying this episode of yours!
Blessings\Rianne
Well, what can I say about this write. Every time I wonder how on earth you manage to write these writings.
You have such distinct voice and style. It reminds me of old types of writing from historical pamphlets where often the knowledge came from the universe, from the elements, sometimes from divine beings. In the norse history it was often seen as spell binding. Though this can be seen in a poetic sense where the writer almost enters a state of trance while they are speaking directly from their sources. Sounds complicated maybe but its actually not that complicated. I think you know what I am trying to describe here. Really enjoying this episode of yours!
Blessings\Rianne
30th Dec 2024 2:53am
Thank you very much for your insight and commentary, as well as even taking the time to read. Yeah, I was sort of creating metaphorical allusion all throughout this, so it can seem "spell binding," heh. I'm glad you can connect to this, or that you even find some sort of semblance of interest. The intent was to show the importance for and need of affection in life, such as is found in marriage, and beyond. Again, I hold your reviews in high regard, so this was a pleasant surprise. Take care, and I'll see you around!
29th Dec 2024 11:37am
I like this a lot. " An innocent smile inoculated my disease, torment
and stress melt away" The beginning reminds me of this quote - if
you stare too long into the abyss, it will stare back at you. this style you
chose made the meaning easy to understand but still with impactful
word combinations.
I believe love can save us.
and stress melt away" The beginning reminds me of this quote - if
you stare too long into the abyss, it will stare back at you. this style you
chose made the meaning easy to understand but still with impactful
word combinations.
I believe love can save us.
30th Dec 2024 2:56am
Thanks for checking it out, and reviewing, and giving commentary. The transition from "torment and stress" to "love and affection" is quite a blessing indeed, to be found in relationships. Yeah, I kind of thought the abyss thing was a bit cheesy or tacky for me, but I'm glad you liked it. I just try to use concise but direct language, in creating a flow and transition throughout each stanza, then take stanza by stanza, and create direction, theme, and focus. I'm a very seasoned writer, when it comes to compact and concrete combinations. Anyway, again, thanks for your support.
30th Dec 2024 10:31pm
I can feel the loneliness in the beginning and how it changes throughout the piece. I liked this.
31st Dec 2024 1:05am
Thanks for checking it out. It is a bit telling of my struggles with loneliness. I'm often carried away in self-definitive vicariousness when I write, heh.
