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A Still Life, What Becomes of the Fruit
All anyone wants to do
is split me,
thumbs in middle to part
through skin tender
as a mandarin’s,
peel me back
to see my center,
drink from both halves,
leave the fruit exposed
to rot and then ask me
if I really expected
more
is split me,
thumbs in middle to part
through skin tender
as a mandarin’s,
peel me back
to see my center,
drink from both halves,
leave the fruit exposed
to rot and then ask me
if I really expected
more
Published 28th Dec 2024
Author's Note
Objectification whether I want it or not. Solicited everywhere I go. Everyone on dating apps is "still figuring out" "looking for short term" so you can't trust anyone who shows interest. Sick to death of it. But writing is and always will be my true love, so I return to it when it feels like there's just nothing genuine anywhere.
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28th Dec 2024 11:19pm
Oh... fuck... OH FUCK... the way you extended this metaphor in short form was goddamn wet-dream material.
The chronic double entredres through the entire piece are sexy and infuriating.
"All anyone wants to do
is split me,"
Feels angry, and like fucking.
"thumbs in middle to part
through skin tender"
Yes, this is amazing. YES.
Thumbs in the middle. Feels like opening a vulva, and you nail the image...
"as a mandarin’s,"
OH SHIT YES!
The way the mandarin folds back and looks like a woman's sex, is ... just yes.
I have never seen this. I've seen damn near every fruit on the planet. Peaches, pears, apples, but ... this... this is hot.
A mandarin. A sweet, soft, handheld piece of fruit.
The perfect personifcation of a woman.
"peel me back
to see my center,"
IT'S SO GOOD
"drink from both halves,"
I HAVE GIRL WOOD. THIS!
"leave the fruit exposed
to rot and then ask me"
OH GOD YES! THE ANGER.
The sex and the abandoment.
To uncover something delicate and perfectly ripe, and the leave it uncovered. To leave it unprotected.
A heart, a pussy, a mandarin orange. All will wither without the right attention.
"if I really expected
more"
This felt like dejection so deep it won't hurt right away.
FUCK. I need a cigarette after that.
This was gold. GOLD.
Don't ever stop writing like this. The universe needs you.
The chronic double entredres through the entire piece are sexy and infuriating.
"All anyone wants to do
is split me,"
Feels angry, and like fucking.
"thumbs in middle to part
through skin tender"
Yes, this is amazing. YES.
Thumbs in the middle. Feels like opening a vulva, and you nail the image...
"as a mandarin’s,"
OH SHIT YES!
The way the mandarin folds back and looks like a woman's sex, is ... just yes.
I have never seen this. I've seen damn near every fruit on the planet. Peaches, pears, apples, but ... this... this is hot.
A mandarin. A sweet, soft, handheld piece of fruit.
The perfect personifcation of a woman.
"peel me back
to see my center,"
IT'S SO GOOD
"drink from both halves,"
I HAVE GIRL WOOD. THIS!
"leave the fruit exposed
to rot and then ask me"
OH GOD YES! THE ANGER.
The sex and the abandoment.
To uncover something delicate and perfectly ripe, and the leave it uncovered. To leave it unprotected.
A heart, a pussy, a mandarin orange. All will wither without the right attention.
"if I really expected
more"
This felt like dejection so deep it won't hurt right away.
FUCK. I need a cigarette after that.
This was gold. GOLD.
Don't ever stop writing like this. The universe needs you.
31st Dec 2024 00:37am
This is really high praise, thank you so much for reading and giving me feedback <3
31st Dec 2024 11:15am
4th Jan 2025 10:27pm
This was so fucking good and i guess leaving everyone craving for it while being wet 🤤
Loved it totally ♥️🥂
Loved it totally ♥️🥂
Echo to a certain extent Betty's comments. Particularly over this section - I agree with her analogies:
humbs in middle to part
through skin tender
as a mandarin’s,
peel me back
to see my center,
I can sense the thought of being 'loved' only to be abandoned like half eaten fruit.
humbs in middle to part
through skin tender
as a mandarin’s,
peel me back
to see my center,
I can sense the thought of being 'loved' only to be abandoned like half eaten fruit.
28th Feb 2025 10:41pm
28th Feb 2025 10:41pm
