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Cedarwood Skin
I inhale deeply,
Sleepily
But my mind won’t ease
I don’t want to leave
The incense of insomnia
I breathe
In again
Marking every second
Against your cedarwood skin
Published 18th Dec 2024
Author's Note
Written for the Incense of Insomnia competition
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19th Dec 2024 00:22am
26th Jan 2025 5:33pm
What a sensual and intimate poem!
The language is lyrical and evocative, with phrases like "I inhale deeply", "cedarwood skin", and "the incense of insomnia" creating a sense of intimacy and closeness.
The use of metaphor ("the incense of insomnia") and sensory details ("I inhale deeply", "cedarwood skin") adds depth and complexity to the poem.
The speaker's emotions are palpable, as they express their longing to stay in the moment, surrounded by the scent of cedarwood and the presence of the other person.
Overall, this poem is a sensual and intimate exploration of the human experience, highlighting the power of physical connection and the longing for intimacy.
The language is lyrical and evocative, with phrases like "I inhale deeply", "cedarwood skin", and "the incense of insomnia" creating a sense of intimacy and closeness.
The use of metaphor ("the incense of insomnia") and sensory details ("I inhale deeply", "cedarwood skin") adds depth and complexity to the poem.
The speaker's emotions are palpable, as they express their longing to stay in the moment, surrounded by the scent of cedarwood and the presence of the other person.
Overall, this poem is a sensual and intimate exploration of the human experience, highlighting the power of physical connection and the longing for intimacy.
