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Time is money!!!
You call that sucking dick, you stupid cow?!
That's supposed to get my rocks off?
Are you fucking kidding me?
What kind of goddamn suck is that?
What the fuck are you trying to do, blow up a fucking balloon?
You're a stupid bitch, you couldn't suck a cock if your fucked up life depended on it.
What the fuck are you looking at?
Oh shit, are you going to start crying?
Oh gee, that breaks my fucking heart.
You better shut-up, or I'll give you something to cry about.
Now what are you doing?
Are you getting frigid on me?
Of all the fucking luck.
Of all the sluts out there in the world, I end up with one that's so fucked up, she can't even suck a goddamn dick!!
CUT!! OK!
That was great but this time with more feeling. Baby, you should cry more at the beginning of his dialog. Don't wait for him to call you a stupid bitch before you let the tears flow. You're doing great though, real passion. I can feel it!!
OK EVERYBODY, BACK TO ONE!!
Let's get the lights up.
Time is money!!
That's supposed to get my rocks off?
Are you fucking kidding me?
What kind of goddamn suck is that?
What the fuck are you trying to do, blow up a fucking balloon?
You're a stupid bitch, you couldn't suck a cock if your fucked up life depended on it.
What the fuck are you looking at?
Oh shit, are you going to start crying?
Oh gee, that breaks my fucking heart.
You better shut-up, or I'll give you something to cry about.
Now what are you doing?
Are you getting frigid on me?
Of all the fucking luck.
Of all the sluts out there in the world, I end up with one that's so fucked up, she can't even suck a goddamn dick!!
CUT!! OK!
That was great but this time with more feeling. Baby, you should cry more at the beginning of his dialog. Don't wait for him to call you a stupid bitch before you let the tears flow. You're doing great though, real passion. I can feel it!!
OK EVERYBODY, BACK TO ONE!!
Let's get the lights up.
Time is money!!
Published 6th Nov 2024
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6th Nov 2024 3:01pm
Do you need a volunteer for a scene? Great write....fresh and different. Hugs and love, Oral
6th Nov 2024 3:22pm
I will call you Oral if any extras are needed.
Thank you for the feedback!
Thank you for the feedback!
6th Nov 2024 4:16pm
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7th Nov 2024 6:45am
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7th Nov 2024 00:36am
7th Nov 2024 6:51am
Great scene, Keith. I mean write. lol. You didn't direct porn back in the 70's, did you? Once you got past the 80's, they didn't even try to write storylines anymore. It's sad that I know this, I'm shutting up now. lol. Appreciate you.
DL
DL
7th Nov 2024 10:35am
HA! Thank you my friend. Porn is still a touchy subject with many people. More people accept it now then ever before, but still, people will look at you in disbelief.
I agree the 70's & 80's had many more story lines. Some of the porn stars were aspiring actors or actresses wanting to get into the mainstream.
All good Damian. I watch porn from every decade. All good my friend.
I agree the 70's & 80's had many more story lines. Some of the porn stars were aspiring actors or actresses wanting to get into the mainstream.
All good Damian. I watch porn from every decade. All good my friend.
7th Nov 2024 8:45pm
7th Nov 2024 11:00pm
Yes! Let's turn back the clock to 1980's MTV. Thanks PAR for the review and RL.
