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In this hearth
shards open beyond eyes
filled with eulogies
fierce flames
euphoria glancing
from our skeleton
we are the kernels
flute bones
where love answered
all questions
mother in your ebony hair
we played hide and seek
climbing through light
as frequencies
mausoleums
fingerpainted wallpaper
a rustic lost door hinge hanging
this is the room
now we finally
may step inside
my father arched over an accordeon
weeping into vaporized void
his sawdust hands
from which we feed
benevolent strangers play
in our kitchen where empty chairs
witness pale dusk
leek lingers across uncropped land
there are no violins nor violets here
only these trees know their purpose
I dream of after and before
a distant house hen cackles
knowingly
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filled with eulogies
fierce flames
euphoria glancing
from our skeleton
we are the kernels
flute bones
where love answered
all questions
mother in your ebony hair
we played hide and seek
climbing through light
as frequencies
mausoleums
fingerpainted wallpaper
a rustic lost door hinge hanging
this is the room
now we finally
may step inside
my father arched over an accordeon
weeping into vaporized void
his sawdust hands
from which we feed
benevolent strangers play
in our kitchen where empty chairs
witness pale dusk
leek lingers across uncropped land
there are no violins nor violets here
only these trees know their purpose
I dream of after and before
a distant house hen cackles
knowingly
copyrights © owned by Rianne 2024
all rights reserved
Published 23rd Oct 2024
Author's Note
Dedicated to my parents,
The sentence this is the room step inside, a line from a Joy Division song
The sentence this is the room step inside, a line from a Joy Division song
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Very puzzling and abstract, but also holds its own in terms of clarity. Just depends on how the reader interprets, I guess. In particular, I like how you fit together the analogies given the metaphors. The love answers line is especially nice. I also like the "ebony hair" line. The rustic hinge line paints a perfect pairing of perception and visual representation of morality and the transition into adulthood. A lot of this is original and extremely creative. Thanks for sharing.
23rd Oct 2024 4:13pm
Thank you C,
I appreciate giving this a thorough read and the lengthy comments.
Yes many details in this one and many stages of life and beyond.
Thank you for sharing your insights, blessings
Rianne
I appreciate giving this a thorough read and the lengthy comments.
Yes many details in this one and many stages of life and beyond.
Thank you for sharing your insights, blessings
Rianne
