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Castles In The Sky
I could dwell in castles that
touch the sky's embrace,
I could gather treasures, no
need for grace.
I could soar to Paris, with a
wish at my command,
Yet I wander through this life,
empty and unplanned.
I could be the starlet, or the
jester at the show,
I could summon rockets, to the stars
I would go.
I could paint my face and leave
them captivated,
yet I’ll drift to sleep alone,
with shadows by my side.
touch the sky's embrace,
I could gather treasures, no
need for grace.
I could soar to Paris, with a
wish at my command,
Yet I wander through this life,
empty and unplanned.
I could be the starlet, or the
jester at the show,
I could summon rockets, to the stars
I would go.
I could paint my face and leave
them captivated,
yet I’ll drift to sleep alone,
with shadows by my side.
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13th Oct 2024 4:51am
Dear S,
I enjoyed the landscape you created with the sky, castles, treasures, rockets. Paris…oh la la beautiful. Rich lovely imagery, the closing stanza creates a safe scape into sleepy time comfort. Where all things are possible snd being alone eliminates someone negatively harshing the dream. Wonderful write. H🌷
I enjoyed the landscape you created with the sky, castles, treasures, rockets. Paris…oh la la beautiful. Rich lovely imagery, the closing stanza creates a safe scape into sleepy time comfort. Where all things are possible snd being alone eliminates someone negatively harshing the dream. Wonderful write. H🌷
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13th Oct 2024 5:17am
A poet like you is never alone…. They have beautiful words to keep them company
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13th Oct 2024 2:15pm
Sam, that's one of the best things anyone has ever said to me. Thank you, my friend.
Re. Castles In The Sky
13th Oct 2024 11:16am
You've said so much in a flowing personal statement...
And did so elegantly.
I feel your vulnerability and longing..
Beautiful writing.
I envy your pen to be able to craft poems like this in a spare and effective way.
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And did so elegantly.
I feel your vulnerability and longing..
Beautiful writing.
I envy your pen to be able to craft poems like this in a spare and effective way.
BIG LIKE
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14th Oct 2024 2:09pm
my pleasure - I enjoy your works, and look forward to many reading many more.
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