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The Rose
I bought you a rose,
you wanted it so,
But then you arose,
And left me alone,
I've just arrived home,
A long time ago,
A warm empty hole,
The lust that you stole,
But if you do go,
Be ready and know,
A red bathtub holds,
The rose that you chose
you wanted it so,
But then you arose,
And left me alone,
I've just arrived home,
A long time ago,
A warm empty hole,
The lust that you stole,
But if you do go,
Be ready and know,
A red bathtub holds,
The rose that you chose
Written by
Alexanjah
(Alexandah)
Published 15th Sep 2024
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Re. The Rose
16th Sep 2024 4:47pm
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Re. The Rose
18th Sep 2024 2:48am
This is dark. The thought of feeling empty
really pulls in this one.
It's always awkward to tell someone great write
when there's an internal struggle going on but here it goes:)
Beautiful closing - all I saw was a red tub full of roses:)
really pulls in this one.
It's always awkward to tell someone great write
when there's an internal struggle going on but here it goes:)
Beautiful closing - all I saw was a red tub full of roses:)
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Re. The Rose
18th Sep 2024 2:58am
Thank you for the sincere consideration of one's struggle because it is indeed one. It's Dark yes. A "could have been but never has been" Type of thought. Thank you for the feed back it's honest and well appreciate.
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Anonymous
27th Sep 2024 7:16pm
Very emotive n tender piece....
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29th Sep 2024 11:53pm
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8th Oct 2024 1:00pm
What a painfully beautiful piece this is, your last line is simply heartwarming.
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Re. The Rose
20th Oct 2024 4:48pm
Enduring & forgiving, that's a deep love. Thank you for entering & good luck in the comp
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