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Grief
Suffocated
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Suffocated
You were
rare air
in my lungs
I lie
vacant-eyed
as my chest
stills
Written by
Betty
Published
27th Jun 2024
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#betrayal
#grief
#hurt
#minimalist
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- Edited 7th Sep 2024 3:45pm
27th Jun 2024 6:56pm
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Re: Re. Suffocated
Betty
27th Jun 2024 9:03pm
Mmm. I like that phrase too.
Thank you for the review!!!! I appreciate you.
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down2dirt
27th Jun 2024 9:55pm
‘were’ seems to be a key word here. The blood of rare meat drips still. Enjoyed!
down2dirt
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Betty
27th Jun 2024 10:42pm
Oh. It’s a were. All the verbs are past tense.
Thanks for the read and review! I appreciate it!
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Honoria
28th Jun 2024 4:50am
Dear B,
This piece reminds me how often I’d rather be elsewhere than deal with the pain of betrayal. Sadness so beautifully expressed.
H🌷
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Betty
28th Jun 2024 12:03pm
Thank you. Yeah. That part.
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28th Jun 2024 8:02pm
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Betty
28th Jun 2024 9:35pm
Thank you!
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