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sub (sans safe word)
Kinks are fun as fuck
and I have them all
so when you said
you liked the
exchange in
BDSM
I assumed
you’d like
to rule
my beautiful body
my beautiful mind
my beautiful will
by tying me
up and
whipping
me until I crumbled
in your arms
like an artistic exhale
that was true
that part of it all
was true
but you used
my intestines to
tie me down
and you
beat me
with my
own aorta
until the blood
left my cheeks
and you hurt me
while I curled
shivering
and distraught
whimpering the safe
word against
your
cement ears
until I was
desperately
utterly
subjugated
and there was nothing
artistic in my exhale
just a dying whisper
for mercy
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Re. sub (sans safe word)
26th Jun 2024 1:11am
Is it too soon for the word RAPE to pop into my head, or am I just another fear factor failure?
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Re: Re. sub (sans safe word)
Oh.
When you tell someone you want don’t to do a certain thing… and they do the thing anyway because they want to, removing your voice from the equation?
Hm. Maybe it’s too soon.
Hey! Long time no interact. Thank you for stopping by.
When you tell someone you want don’t to do a certain thing… and they do the thing anyway because they want to, removing your voice from the equation?
Hm. Maybe it’s too soon.
Hey! Long time no interact. Thank you for stopping by.
Re: Re. sub (sans safe word)
26th Jun 2024 2:17am
Oh I've been reading your posts, but I'm ever hesitant to comment for fear of saying something stupid.
Not that that's ever stopped me before:)
Not that that's ever stopped me before:)
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Re: Re. sub (sans safe word)
26th Jun 2024 3:23am
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Re: Re. sub (sans safe word)
27th Jun 2024 1:50am
Just say the thing, man. Dare to say the dumb shit, and long as it’s not intentional mean it’ll be cool.
Do you. Write you. Review you. Be you. If they don’t like it, they’ll block you and those weren’t your peeps anyway.
Welcome to the underground. Beware, there are some sticky spots on the floor.
Do you. Write you. Review you. Be you. If they don’t like it, they’ll block you and those weren’t your peeps anyway.
Welcome to the underground. Beware, there are some sticky spots on the floor.
Anonymous
- Edited 18th Sep 2024 8:45am
27th Jun 2024 2:39am
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Re: Re. sub (sans safe word)
First: if you do that, hurt someone on accident, say you’re sorry and delete the comment. Don’t get defensive, it’s someone else’s personal hell, just seek to make it right.
Second: life is a risk. Take the risk.
Third: stick to the writing at first. Just the art. I’ve been here a while and made friends. I am comfortable saying raw shit to people I have a strong rapport with.
Otherwise I stick to the writing. How did the writing move you? What did you get? What is your interpretation? What was your favorite part? Did you see any typos or little areas of structure or grammar that you could note.
Skip poems and people you don’t like. I don’t like poems with photos or rhymes, but I do like some people who use those tools. Otherwise I scroll.
But get out and put the poetry first. Review the art as art. If it were in a gallery would you censor what it evoked? No. When you build rapport you can comment on the subject a little more.
It’s super cool to hear, as an artist, that I made you feel something. Tell me about that if nothing else.
New topic:
Also? Fuck that. Rape. It’s rape. Say it.
It makes people uncomfortable? Gee. That must suck.
I’m so sick of political correctness and the Karening of the world. We stopped saying rape because it hurt men’s careers and reputation.
(I was a journalist, a good one, for 14 years. I was there. I promise you, that’s the reason.)
Rape. Rape. Rape. Rape.
I give you permission to say RAPE.
You address it by acknowledging it happened and telling the victim you believe them and that you’re sorry they had to survive that. End.
Or you comment on the strength it takes to share that truth. End.
Or you say the feeling it evoked. End.
You don’t have to personally connect to an artist. This site is about art. Personally connect to the work and the rest will follow.
As for your thing?
Post it. You are anonymous here. Be brave. That’s how art happens, we push boundaries and then we push harder; and if we aren’t here for the art … why the fuck are we here?
Also edgy shit rocks. Post it. I’ll hit you back.
Be brave and if people are mean to you, be braver. I got your back if you need it.
I have no fear.
Second: life is a risk. Take the risk.
Third: stick to the writing at first. Just the art. I’ve been here a while and made friends. I am comfortable saying raw shit to people I have a strong rapport with.
Otherwise I stick to the writing. How did the writing move you? What did you get? What is your interpretation? What was your favorite part? Did you see any typos or little areas of structure or grammar that you could note.
Skip poems and people you don’t like. I don’t like poems with photos or rhymes, but I do like some people who use those tools. Otherwise I scroll.
But get out and put the poetry first. Review the art as art. If it were in a gallery would you censor what it evoked? No. When you build rapport you can comment on the subject a little more.
It’s super cool to hear, as an artist, that I made you feel something. Tell me about that if nothing else.
New topic:
Also? Fuck that. Rape. It’s rape. Say it.
It makes people uncomfortable? Gee. That must suck.
I’m so sick of political correctness and the Karening of the world. We stopped saying rape because it hurt men’s careers and reputation.
(I was a journalist, a good one, for 14 years. I was there. I promise you, that’s the reason.)
Rape. Rape. Rape. Rape.
I give you permission to say RAPE.
You address it by acknowledging it happened and telling the victim you believe them and that you’re sorry they had to survive that. End.
Or you comment on the strength it takes to share that truth. End.
Or you say the feeling it evoked. End.
You don’t have to personally connect to an artist. This site is about art. Personally connect to the work and the rest will follow.
As for your thing?
Post it. You are anonymous here. Be brave. That’s how art happens, we push boundaries and then we push harder; and if we aren’t here for the art … why the fuck are we here?
Also edgy shit rocks. Post it. I’ll hit you back.
Be brave and if people are mean to you, be braver. I got your back if you need it.
I have no fear.
Anonymous
- Edited 18th Sep 2024 8:45am
27th Jun 2024 7:15pm
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Re. sub (sans safe word)
26th Jun 2024 1:12am
Vivid, phenomenal write. I love the phrase artistic exhale. Not so fine line sometimes between delicious intensity and brutality.
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Re: Re. sub (sans safe word)
26th Jun 2024 2:01am
I live for intensity. But yeah. Some things you can’t after-care through.
Thank you! I fucking love you for the comment and RL!
Re. sub (sans safe word)
26th Jun 2024 6:29am
Dominating vs. Domineering.
Mutual consent is sexy.
Unilateral destruction is not.
Butt vs. But.
A broken will can be a spiritual goal, but a broken spirit is not.
Tough piece for me.
Mutual consent is sexy.
Unilateral destruction is not.
Butt vs. But.
A broken will can be a spiritual goal, but a broken spirit is not.
Tough piece for me.
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Re: Re. sub (sans safe word)
26th Jun 2024 10:38pm
You are so fucking wise my sweet friend.
It’s true.
Breaking a spirit… the pieces never get glued back together just right, do they?
It’s true.
Breaking a spirit… the pieces never get glued back together just right, do they?
Re: Re. sub (sans safe word)
27th Jun 2024 3:41pm
"Kintsugi is the Japanese art of putting broken pottery pieces back together with gold — a metaphor for embracing your flaws and imperfections. “You won't realize your full potential until you go through the tough times,” Kumai says. With that said, Kintsugi takes work and awareness in order for it to truly be healing."
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Re. sub (sans safe word)
26th Jun 2024 6:37am
there has to be an area of respect on either side of the blurred line, otherwise it’s just one sided shit where the outcome is already decided and safe words are as useful as cheap toilet paper.
Loved your lines about being tied with your intestines and being beat with your aorta.
Enjoyed!
down2dirt
Loved your lines about being tied with your intestines and being beat with your aorta.
Enjoyed!
down2dirt
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Re: Re. sub (sans safe word)
26th Jun 2024 10:41pm
God you are all so fucking creative!
There are epic poems in the comments today
This?! So much exactly what I wanted to say:
otherwise it’s just
one sided shit
where the outcome
is already decided
and safe words
are as useful
as cheap toilet paper.
You’re the shit, DD. I’d buy three-ply for you.
There are epic poems in the comments today
This?! So much exactly what I wanted to say:
otherwise it’s just
one sided shit
where the outcome
is already decided
and safe words
are as useful
as cheap toilet paper.
You’re the shit, DD. I’d buy three-ply for you.
Re. sub (sans safe word)
26th Jun 2024 6:06pm
Brutality is an art form, this is true. However, to be subjugated by an emotional and mental beat down shines a special kind of beauty into the art of the brutal. I’ll leave it at the art, considering subjects would only lead to an anger that I would be unable to properly release. Your delivery of this scenario in poetic fashion was amazingly vivid and real.
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Re: Re. sub (sans safe word)
26th Jun 2024 10:47pm
Ugh. An emotional and mental beat down feels … it just…
I mean the whole shame kink is one thing. Like, fuck yeah, tell me I’m dirty and bad and that you have to punish me for all those men looking at my ass like that…
But subjugation from mental cruelty…
It only feels beautiful learning to stand again after the sting of the psychological whip fades to memory. The resurrection feels godlike in its beauty.
Thank you for your introspection.
I mean the whole shame kink is one thing. Like, fuck yeah, tell me I’m dirty and bad and that you have to punish me for all those men looking at my ass like that…
But subjugation from mental cruelty…
It only feels beautiful learning to stand again after the sting of the psychological whip fades to memory. The resurrection feels godlike in its beauty.
Thank you for your introspection.
Anonymous
- Edited 12th Aug 2024 3:45am
27th Jun 2024 10:12am
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27th Jun 2024 4:52pm