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Waiting For News
Driven by foggy elements tonight
Fundamental chaos feels so right
On the brink of perpetual rage
Been living in this virtual stone age
Love is dying in fields of death
Strung out on cosmic angel breath
Figure out where the line ends
Manipulating light with subtle bends
Selling promises to achieve faith
Visited by another shady wraith
About to turn off this tired engine
While the world continues to spin
Murder committed by random design
Stay tuned for the story on channel nine
Where propaganda creates views
Hope no one was waiting for news
Fundamental chaos feels so right
On the brink of perpetual rage
Been living in this virtual stone age
Love is dying in fields of death
Strung out on cosmic angel breath
Figure out where the line ends
Manipulating light with subtle bends
Selling promises to achieve faith
Visited by another shady wraith
About to turn off this tired engine
While the world continues to spin
Murder committed by random design
Stay tuned for the story on channel nine
Where propaganda creates views
Hope no one was waiting for news
Published 24th Jun 2024
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24th Jun 2024 6:36am
24th Jun 2024 6:52am
24th Jun 2024 10:25am
Dear D,
I enjoyed both the message of the piece as well as the structure. The closing couplet is stellar. I’ve always struggled to use rhyme. Your use is so well timed. Excellent write. H🌷
I enjoyed both the message of the piece as well as the structure. The closing couplet is stellar. I’ve always struggled to use rhyme. Your use is so well timed. Excellent write. H🌷
25th Jun 2024 4:00am
H.
Thanks so much for the wonderful commentary and kind words. Appreciate you.
DL
Thanks so much for the wonderful commentary and kind words. Appreciate you.
DL
24th Jun 2024 1:53pm
Ok, with the title, that was a brilliant ironic twist
It’s all shit. But we are waiting to be told about it. I can’t tell if it’s anger, disgust or apathy shading the text because there are elements of all three.
Really nice word play.
It’s all shit. But we are waiting to be told about it. I can’t tell if it’s anger, disgust or apathy shading the text because there are elements of all three.
Really nice word play.
25th Jun 2024 4:02am
25th Jun 2024 3:27am
It's all out of control.
I really enjoyed all of the two-line stanzas too.
It was easy on the eyes to read.
Great write!
I really enjoyed all of the two-line stanzas too.
It was easy on the eyes to read.
Great write!
25th Jun 2024 4:03am
