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Feet Are Planted
These four walls keep closing in
Claustrophobic personality
Same story with a different spin
What I’d give for less reality
Burden involves heavy lifting
Wallowing in habitual vices
In my head I’m always rifting
While waiting for a new crisis
Dreams are all I’m giving up
It’s all spiritual espionage
Demons will always corrupt
It’s best to duck and dodge
Wrestling with these ghouls
Judgement from the courts
More violence in our schools
Wait until the truth retorts
Can’t outrun father time
God’s gonna cut me down
His reason his rhyme
Foolish me such a clown
In need of a second chance
Seems it’s been granted
Change my style in this dance
Now that my feet are planted
Claustrophobic personality
Same story with a different spin
What I’d give for less reality
Burden involves heavy lifting
Wallowing in habitual vices
In my head I’m always rifting
While waiting for a new crisis
Dreams are all I’m giving up
It’s all spiritual espionage
Demons will always corrupt
It’s best to duck and dodge
Wrestling with these ghouls
Judgement from the courts
More violence in our schools
Wait until the truth retorts
Can’t outrun father time
God’s gonna cut me down
His reason his rhyme
Foolish me such a clown
In need of a second chance
Seems it’s been granted
Change my style in this dance
Now that my feet are planted
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6th Jun 2024 3:34pm
Sounds like you are ready to take on the world, which is great. Really enjoyed the read.
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6th Jun 2024 11:09pm
Thanks for your commentary, and the RL. Glad you dig it. Appreciate you.
DL
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6th Jun 2024 10:15pm
Second chances are a blessing that aren't readily recognized by many. Make the most of it!
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7th Jun 2024 8:30am
Dear DL,
This has a very song-like meter. Sometimes I will sing a poem when there’s a natural rhythm. I appreciated the idea of not misusing an opportunity of a second chance. Great message.
H🌷
This has a very song-like meter. Sometimes I will sing a poem when there’s a natural rhythm. I appreciated the idea of not misusing an opportunity of a second chance. Great message.
H🌷
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7th Jun 2024 9:09am
H.
Thanks for the great commentary. Truth be told I've been a lyricist off and on for thirty years. Poetry, and telling stories are my solo project. I had a songwriting partner, but we parted ways. But I've always had that song-like meter. It's just muscle memory after so many years. Appreciate you.
DL
Thanks for the great commentary. Truth be told I've been a lyricist off and on for thirty years. Poetry, and telling stories are my solo project. I had a songwriting partner, but we parted ways. But I've always had that song-like meter. It's just muscle memory after so many years. Appreciate you.
DL
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