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on my sweet sixteen
on one night
i was lying
naked under
the full harvest moon
my flower was
in full bloom
he was a man
looking for a
flower with
seductive beauty
he saw me
and came
in my room
through the window
when he saw my
flower puff...
he thought,,,
this must be
a magical flower...
in wonderment
he started
observing petals
with his fingers
then he bite my
petals with his
wishful eyes
he caressed
my bubbly hips
and again moved
his fingers to
crevice of my
flower...
it was a first
contact of flesh to flesh...
and he kept fucking
my hot hole with
slapping by his
soft balls, all night
n made
my flower a violet rose...
i was lying
naked under
the full harvest moon
my flower was
in full bloom
he was a man
looking for a
flower with
seductive beauty
he saw me
and came
in my room
through the window
when he saw my
flower puff...
he thought,,,
this must be
a magical flower...
in wonderment
he started
observing petals
with his fingers
then he bite my
petals with his
wishful eyes
he caressed
my bubbly hips
and again moved
his fingers to
crevice of my
flower...
it was a first
contact of flesh to flesh...
and he kept fucking
my hot hole with
slapping by his
soft balls, all night
n made
my flower a violet rose...
Published 31st May 2024
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Anonymous
31st May 2024 11:55am
Someone's been lucky...nice use of words and metaphor ✨✨🍻🍻
31st May 2024 11:59am
Anonymous
31st May 2024 12:13pm
🤗🤗
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31st May 2024 2:04pm
It is a beautiful look into a woman's first encounter. the color of the flower is significant. "Violet Rose"
Beautiful writing Fia xoxo
Beautiful writing Fia xoxo
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1st Jun 2024 12:54pm
Lovely, especially the beginning. “Wishful eyes” was a wonderful turn of phrase
1st Jun 2024 12:59pm
1st Jun 2024 2:23pm
1st Jun 2024 2:54pm
In our country certainly sweet 16 is the youngest legal age to start (hence younger girls who tempt sex are called "jail bait"), this may resonate with many women who lost their virginities to a lover at that age. Favourite extract:
he .....made
my flower a violet rose...
he .....made
my flower a violet rose...
14th Jun 2024 4:52am
