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The Wishing Stars
Come lay with me beneath the stars
Making up verse
And quiet idles
Of this or that
Between wine and kisses
Or just your closeness
With night
Like feelings
Deepening
The sensation of the hammocks sway
Neath trees' deep shadowed greens
Bathed in moonlight's silver
Quiet all around
Save the crackle of fire
Just you
And
Me
Step into my world
Making up verse
And quiet idles
Of this or that
Between wine and kisses
Or just your closeness
With night
Like feelings
Deepening
The sensation of the hammocks sway
Neath trees' deep shadowed greens
Bathed in moonlight's silver
Quiet all around
Save the crackle of fire
Just you
And
Me
Step into my world
Published 29th May 2024
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Did you make the arrow on purpose?
The way this dripped down with sweetness and seduction, AND?! IT LOOKS LIKE AN ARROW.
I really liked this AJ.
As always, you are romantic as fuck, and you paint beautiful pictures with your words.
OK, I had to come back, because this stylistic offering is total 1950s romance, and that era... it was everything in American poetry.
This reminds me SO much of one of my absolute favorites, Lawrence Ferlinghetti's "Come Lie With Me and Be My Love" that I had to come back. It's a great piece and it resonates to that era, that texture.
The way this dripped down with sweetness and seduction, AND?! IT LOOKS LIKE AN ARROW.
I really liked this AJ.
As always, you are romantic as fuck, and you paint beautiful pictures with your words.
OK, I had to come back, because this stylistic offering is total 1950s romance, and that era... it was everything in American poetry.
This reminds me SO much of one of my absolute favorites, Lawrence Ferlinghetti's "Come Lie With Me and Be My Love" that I had to come back. It's a great piece and it resonates to that era, that texture.
Ok, lots to unpack here. So, I can neither confirm nor deny - but I do love the patterns that centering makes. I'm a visual kinda guy.
I had never heard of Lawrence Ferlinghetti's "Come Lie With Me and Be My Love" until just now. Its a beautiful piece. I like Rainer Maria Rilke's "You Who Never Arrived" (early 1900's) or e e Cummings [i carry your heart with me(i carry it in] (1950's), but found these through random chance.
As for romanticism, I am, my dear, the last of the dinosaurs.
I had never heard of Lawrence Ferlinghetti's "Come Lie With Me and Be My Love" until just now. Its a beautiful piece. I like Rainer Maria Rilke's "You Who Never Arrived" (early 1900's) or e e Cummings [i carry your heart with me(i carry it in] (1950's), but found these through random chance.
As for romanticism, I am, my dear, the last of the dinosaurs.
29th May 2024 4:52am
Dear AJ,
I wish I had a molecule of your romantic writing ability. Seeing and reimagining things through your poetic lens is magical because I don’t have that gift. Helps make life a little softer and definitely more romantically intriguing. Lovely write. H🌷
I wish I had a molecule of your romantic writing ability. Seeing and reimagining things through your poetic lens is magical because I don’t have that gift. Helps make life a little softer and definitely more romantically intriguing. Lovely write. H🌷
31st May 2024 11:02pm
Some of us scribble, and others, my dear Honoria, inspire such scribbles. 🌼😁
4th Jul 2024 2:12am
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