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Bitch
If you had learned how to fuck better
without screwing around
then maybe
we would be happy now
You used to take pride
in your appearance
you fixed your hair and when
you wore make-up
you applied it with care
Now you look grey
tired and puffy eyed
You're a bloated panda
scowling and frowning
at everything I say
Look how big you've got
I understand some women
thicken up a bit as they get older
but you could win prizes for it
Every time you open
your filthy mouth
it's always the same
there's nothing positive
it's always negatives
strung together one after the other
Give it a rest or get out
Bitch
without screwing around
then maybe
we would be happy now
You used to take pride
in your appearance
you fixed your hair and when
you wore make-up
you applied it with care
Now you look grey
tired and puffy eyed
You're a bloated panda
scowling and frowning
at everything I say
Look how big you've got
I understand some women
thicken up a bit as they get older
but you could win prizes for it
Every time you open
your filthy mouth
it's always the same
there's nothing positive
it's always negatives
strung together one after the other
Give it a rest or get out
Bitch
Published 21st Feb 2010
| Edited 18th Jul 2012
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22nd Feb 2010 1:58am
22nd Feb 2010 5:51am
Thanks for that big compliment - and for taking the time and trouble to comment.
Anonymous
22nd Feb 2010 11:02am
and a fair bit of resentment - articulated with your usual clarity.
Enjoyed this, do you mind if I plagiarize this when speaking to the women in my life later?
S
Enjoyed this, do you mind if I plagiarize this when speaking to the women in my life later?
S
22nd Feb 2010 1:04pm
By all means - but it's not recommended for indiscriminate use, Steven. I'm sure you are more than capable of producing something equally vicious. It's frightening what we can find when we delve into our own emotions. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Anonymous
22nd Feb 2010 5:45pm
I think it belongs in the 'angst' category, to be honest. I really don't mean to be rude, Abra, but this strikes me more as just a catalogue of misogynistic stereotypes and insults than verse. I love your work, but this came across as just nasty and mean-spirited.
22nd Feb 2010 5:57pm
I think you may have missed the point, Jack - in that I am trying to expose stereotypical male attitudes in a relationship for what they are. It is a vile series of statements - none of which I would personally agree with. A bullied wife would get this straightaway. But nonetheless your reaction is valued - and as always I appreciate your feedback.
Anonymous
22nd Feb 2010 6:02pm
from the perspective of a mean and hateful husband or lover. I can appreciate your irony now you've pointed it out to me, though I still worry that, upon first analysis, a lot of readers might assume that these are your own sentiments.
22nd Feb 2010 6:08pm
I put this piece in LOVE because I think it reflects the trials & pain which that category covers. If people want to judge me by what I write I can't stop that. Of course, those who know me better would tell you it's usually not first person material. If I'd done everything I've written about in person I'd already be dead from exhaustion.
