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Tomorrow
If I were to
Drop dead
Tomorrow
Will anyone
Remember
In sorrow?
Would it
Even make
A difference?
Does it matter?
Or am too
insignificance?
Would anyone
Even Notice
I was gone?
Will they
Remember
The song
I lived
Or the words
I sang?
I lived
As if there
Was no tomorrow.
All the
Words I wrote
Are all so hollow.
I tried to leave
An ink of blood
In a word I said.
I tried to leave
A drop of blood
In a lover’s bed.
The lives I loved
already forgot
I was alive
The stories I wrote
already dead
Did not Survive
All that is left
Are two words
Itched on a stone
Fading away
Flying like sand
into the unknown
Just remember
One day when
You walk on me
On a beach
Somewhere
Beside the sea
That that is
Where I used
To love and play
And that is
Where I pray
For one day to stay
Drop dead
Tomorrow
Will anyone
Remember
In sorrow?
Would it
Even make
A difference?
Does it matter?
Or am too
insignificance?
Would anyone
Even Notice
I was gone?
Will they
Remember
The song
I lived
Or the words
I sang?
I lived
As if there
Was no tomorrow.
All the
Words I wrote
Are all so hollow.
I tried to leave
An ink of blood
In a word I said.
I tried to leave
A drop of blood
In a lover’s bed.
The lives I loved
already forgot
I was alive
The stories I wrote
already dead
Did not Survive
All that is left
Are two words
Itched on a stone
Fading away
Flying like sand
into the unknown
Just remember
One day when
You walk on me
On a beach
Somewhere
Beside the sea
That that is
Where I used
To love and play
And that is
Where I pray
For one day to stay
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Re. Tomorrow
7th May 2024 4:24am
Depressing and sad.
Tonight, I've read about someone who wants to commit murder. Now someone who considers death.
I hope you feel better soon.
Tonight, I've read about someone who wants to commit murder. Now someone who considers death.
I hope you feel better soon.
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7th May 2024 9:54am
Depression yes…. Commit murder no… I wouldn’t go that far… but thank you for your comment DB
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7th May 2024 4:27am
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7th May 2024 9:57am
I do have a dark side … it’s the other side of my coin.. so it all depends on how the coin lands that day …. Yesterday the coin landed badly…. Tomorrow I don’t know… thank you for reading my friend
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7th May 2024 4:33am
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7th May 2024 11:55am
I love dark. As long as you get a ray of light. I am ok with it. We all have dark.
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Re. Tomorrow
7th May 2024 5:39am
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7th May 2024 10:00am
Re. Tomorrow
None of the above will matter to you, my friend, once you are gone (I fear). I say 'fear' because you talk of the unknown like you somehow know it, with lines like, 'Flying like sand into the unknown.' There were many emotionally rendering lines in this write. My fav:
'Just remember
One day when
You walk on me
On a beach
Somewhere
Beside the sea
That that is
Where I used
To love and play' 😊
'Just remember
One day when
You walk on me
On a beach
Somewhere
Beside the sea
That that is
Where I used
To love and play' 😊
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7th May 2024 10:02am
We will all return to the sand one day … so when we walk on earth we should remember we are walking on ourselves…
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7th May 2024 10:04am
People generally walk all over me even when I'm alive, lol! Hope you don't mind my ironic humour. 😉
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7th May 2024 10:33am
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Re. Tomorrow
7th May 2024 10:54am
Thoughts I have often had... well penned dear poet... you will be remembered...
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7th May 2024 10:58am
Unfortunately many of us do… that is why we are poets.. only words might survive once we are gone.. anything else is just dust… thank you I appreciate your sentiment fellow poet
Re. Tomorrow
7th May 2024 2:42pm
What a profound write this is. I asked myself the same question, I think many of us do.
...you will be remembered...
...you will be remembered...
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7th May 2024 2:46pm
Re. Tomorrow
7th May 2024 4:01pm
Okay, stop scaring people, Sam. I leave you alone for five minutes and this is what I come back to?
We both know you’re not going to ‘drop dead’, so just cut it out. You’re going to die on your back with me on top of you and a smile on your face. I’ll show the video at your funeral so everyone will remember you… especially me.
We both know you’re not going to ‘drop dead’, so just cut it out. You’re going to die on your back with me on top of you and a smile on your face. I’ll show the video at your funeral so everyone will remember you… especially me.
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7th May 2024 8:03pm
I’ve always known you’ll be the death of me one day.. whether on me, under me, on top of me.. that all depends what we will be doing on that day… I don’t know about smiling though… that also depends if you are. After that I don’t care who sees the video. You’ll have to explain all that to everyone….good luck
Re. Tomorrow
7th May 2024 8:08pm
👏 👏 👏 👏 👏!!nice 👌 ink spill 👏 sam!!
I'm afraid that the only memories the living will have are of the uplifting and inspirational and motivational 🙌 ones you leave behind!!
Like 👍 that one that continues to live out over and over threw generations time after time christ in the good 👍 book!!
Sad to say if your a criminal or crook or even a killer no one will even bother to remember or even care how you looked!!
Great 👍 work again sam! Please 🙏 keep on writing ✍ ok 👌 peace ✌ and blessings 🙏 always
I'm afraid that the only memories the living will have are of the uplifting and inspirational and motivational 🙌 ones you leave behind!!
Like 👍 that one that continues to live out over and over threw generations time after time christ in the good 👍 book!!
Sad to say if your a criminal or crook or even a killer no one will even bother to remember or even care how you looked!!
Great 👍 work again sam! Please 🙏 keep on writing ✍ ok 👌 peace ✌ and blessings 🙏 always
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Re: Re. Tomorrow
7th May 2024 8:14pm
Great… it’s good to know I’m either a criminal or crook or a killer ….can I choose which one… I’m joking… but thank you for your heartfelt comment
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7th May 2024 8:23pm
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7th May 2024 10:56pm
OMG…. There is a “bad” ?!…
Now “good” I understand… that’s to get rid of me
As for “indifference”… you already gotten rid of me and you don’t care
As for the “bad” ok… that is bad…and that’s best thing anyone has ever said of me…
Now “good” I understand… that’s to get rid of me
As for “indifference”… you already gotten rid of me and you don’t care
As for the “bad” ok… that is bad…and that’s best thing anyone has ever said of me…
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Re. Tomorrow
7th May 2024 9:09pm
Quite often we aren’t aware of the impact we have on others. Your writing elicits strong emotions. People won’t forget that or you.
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7th May 2024 10:15pm
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2nd Jun 2024 10:52am
Very good. Tomorrow is morning and morning is day and day is God and all of those are time and time is space. Such a waste :P
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