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I only fuck like this when it's green
We get stoned
and I let you fuck me
like a porn star
ass up head down
cause I know
you like the view
But how we start
is never how we end
and I couldn't ask
for your violence tonight
though I liked the way
your face looked
when I had my hands
around your throat
And I never finish first
but you make it
worth the wait
and I'm not sorry
I made a mess of the bed
(And I hope our house mate
heard us
as payback
for forcing us
to listen to Nickelback
while we fucked
and making me stop to laugh
every time an ad came up
in his YouTube playlist)
and I let you fuck me
like a porn star
ass up head down
cause I know
you like the view
But how we start
is never how we end
and I couldn't ask
for your violence tonight
though I liked the way
your face looked
when I had my hands
around your throat
And I never finish first
but you make it
worth the wait
and I'm not sorry
I made a mess of the bed
(And I hope our house mate
heard us
as payback
for forcing us
to listen to Nickelback
while we fucked
and making me stop to laugh
every time an ad came up
in his YouTube playlist)
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Re. I only fuck like this when it's green
5th May 2024 3:50pm
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5th May 2024 8:32pm
Re. I only fuck like this when it's green
5th May 2024 4:54pm
Re: Re. I only fuck like this when it's green
5th May 2024 8:32pm
Red is a great colour. I was stoned when I wrote this and the title reference was to the green.
Re. I only fuck like this when it's green
5th May 2024 8:51pm
This was brilliant.
I think you have a rogue “I” in the mix:
“and making me I stop to laugh”
The raw moment, the levity, the Nickleback… the ADS?! Amazing. Really.
I think you have a rogue “I” in the mix:
“and making me I stop to laugh”
The raw moment, the levity, the Nickleback… the ADS?! Amazing. Really.
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Re: Re. I only fuck like this when it's green
6th May 2024 7:33am
Rogue I fixed. Thank you. I always miss something. And thank you for enjoying. Always love when you pop in Betty. You're one of my favourite writers here, and I appreciate any feedback you throw my way.
Re. I only fuck like this when it's green
5th May 2024 9:10pm
you know even shit has energy whodoo you know pure energy will save you be careful where you put your dick though the black holes of space will infect you with a disease there is no cure for.
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Re: Re. I only fuck like this when it's green
5th May 2024 9:45pm
Bren, I love you, and I really hope you find a moment of clarity in this dark place, to get some help.
Re. I only fuck like this when it's green
6th May 2024 3:37am
Omg awesome. This is a nice surprise from you! It's not overly porno and actually almost like a day in the routine of things. Just get it over with, type.
I'm still smiling over it. Great perspective write.
I'm still smiling over it. Great perspective write.
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Re: Re. I only fuck like this when it's green
6th May 2024 3:38am
Re: Re. I only fuck like this when it's green
6th May 2024 7:30am
Thank you so much Styxian. I'm not a big erotica writer, but I was still stoned last night, post-fuck, and I thought "I have to pen this down", so I did.
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9th May 2024 7:23am
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