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Still-born Tomorrow
Mysterious moon.
Lay up on the sun's hot fire
Still-born tomorrow.
Lay up on the sun's hot fire
Still-born tomorrow.
Author's Note
My eclipse haiku. Day darkens yet void of a tomorrow.
Morbid thoughts. 😊
Morbid thoughts. 😊
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Re. Still-born Tomorrow
8th Apr 2024 11:32am
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8th Apr 2024 11:35am
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8th Apr 2024 11:42am
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8th Apr 2024 12:24pm
It's a metaphor, but the word still-born is a very painful thing to happen. I wouldn't know, but I'm not making light of it.
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8th Apr 2024 11:59am
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8th Apr 2024 12:25pm
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8th Apr 2024 12:43pm
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8th Apr 2024 1:27pm
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8th Apr 2024 1:31pm
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8th Apr 2024 1:53pm
I mostly don't, lol.
My words do come from my soul.
Thx 4 reading! Have a great day!
My words do come from my soul.
Thx 4 reading! Have a great day!
Re. Still-born Tomorrow
8th Apr 2024 6:11pm
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8th Apr 2024 6:13pm
Thank you. I was so stubborn to try to write them, now I'm addicted.
Figured had to give the eclipse a shout out.
Thx for reading!
Figured had to give the eclipse a shout out.
Thx for reading!
Re. Still-born Tomorrow
8th Apr 2024 6:19pm
You have perfected haiku. This one is truly brilliant and your pic amazing. You got it going on, girl!
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8th Apr 2024 6:39pm
Made my afternoon! I was afraid the ending metaphor might be offensive.
I was just trying to express the dark from the eclipse goes back to light without
bringing a tomorrow. Thank you for your continual support it means so much.
I was just trying to express the dark from the eclipse goes back to light without
bringing a tomorrow. Thank you for your continual support it means so much.
Re: Re. Still-born Tomorrow
8th Apr 2024 6:42pm
As I said before, in other words, of course, this is pure poetic gold. Definitely not a touch of offense! Keeping it real, dear friend!
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Re. Still-born Tomorrow
8th Apr 2024 7:12pm
I can take this as a personal nudge
in my own lifeline...
A treasure you are indeed
Luv, Thia
in my own lifeline...
A treasure you are indeed
Luv, Thia
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Re: Re. Still-born Tomorrow
8th Apr 2024 7:51pm
Thank you, I'm so happy it resonated.
I treasure touching people with words.
Have a great night, thx for your support!
I treasure touching people with words.
Have a great night, thx for your support!
Re. Still-born Tomorrow
9th Apr 2024 4:03pm
For a girl who's in love with the moon, not gifted in the measured verse for haikus and tends to write in metaphors, I highly admire this!
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9th Apr 2024 4:55pm
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9th Apr 2024 5:24pm
You think?
I don't know how you could've taken my words and RL add as anything else but a sincere compliment.🌷
I don't know how you could've taken my words and RL add as anything else but a sincere compliment.🌷
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Re: Re. Still-born Tomorrow
9th Apr 2024 7:01pm
My apologies, it was a lovely compliment. I just misunderstood.
Thank you for reading list too!
Have a nice day 😊
Thank you for reading list too!
Have a nice day 😊