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A Shadow
Haunted by a dark shiver,
that creeps like a shadow's quiver.
A blackening cold
spreading upon my bones.
Confronted by the raw dank,
invasive thoughts of the unknown.
Hope is seen gaunt wandering my halls.
That despair is desperate to taint.
But strength has heard the ancient call.
The brightest gold sun shines
through the shriveled berry branches.
Blessed with newborn tiny blossom enhancements.
Away from the chaotic complexity of
the dark thought's advancement.
For when a shadow exists
that belongs to no sun.
I no longer shrivel in a cruel questioning dark.
Blossoming buds caress my soul's naked bark.
Spring's novice light makes the shadows dance & stun.
that creeps like a shadow's quiver.
A blackening cold
spreading upon my bones.
Confronted by the raw dank,
invasive thoughts of the unknown.
Hope is seen gaunt wandering my halls.
That despair is desperate to taint.
But strength has heard the ancient call.
The brightest gold sun shines
through the shriveled berry branches.
Blessed with newborn tiny blossom enhancements.
Away from the chaotic complexity of
the dark thought's advancement.
For when a shadow exists
that belongs to no sun.
I no longer shrivel in a cruel questioning dark.
Blossoming buds caress my soul's naked bark.
Spring's novice light makes the shadows dance & stun.
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Re. A Shadow
25th Mar 2024 5:34pm
You have a beautiful soul, which shines through in your poetry. Perfect and executed with precision. Happy Spring Debbie!
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25th Mar 2024 6:25pm
Oh thank you so very much. Happy Spring to you too!
Such kind words you said - I know you meant them too
Such kind words you said - I know you meant them too
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25th Mar 2024 6:28pm
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25th Mar 2024 5:51pm
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25th Mar 2024 6:27pm
Aww. Thank you much, that means a lot coming from you.
A lot goes into getting these poems just right.
A lot of my soul, so it's nice when people like it.
A lot goes into getting these poems just right.
A lot of my soul, so it's nice when people like it.
Re. A Shadow
25th Mar 2024 6:29pm
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25th Mar 2024 6:42pm
Hi! I'm so happy you stopped bye. Thank you so much.
The theme of my work right now a lot is turning dark times
into hope.
Thank you for the lovely comments. 🌺
The theme of my work right now a lot is turning dark times
into hope.
Thank you for the lovely comments. 🌺
Re: Re. A Shadow
25th Mar 2024 7:03pm
You are welcome, Debbie! I love your concept! You nailed it with this one!
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Re: Re. A Shadow
25th Mar 2024 7:45pm
Thank you so much. Every one is too kind.
I just try to write things that might resonate.
Thank you for stopping bye!
I just try to write things that might resonate.
Thank you for stopping bye!
Re. A Shadow
25th Mar 2024 8:16pm
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25th Mar 2024 8:18pm
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25th Mar 2024 10:17pm
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25th Mar 2024 10:24pm
They do. You need light to cast a shadow.
What about the shadows not cast by light 😊
Thx for reading
What about the shadows not cast by light 😊
Thx for reading
Re. A Shadow
1st Apr 2024 12:35pm
I like the theme. You depict a transitioning and emotional direction with metaphors of nature quite well. Cold, dark, and depressing atmosphere, blossoming into vibrant and vivid joy. You have quite eloquent and expressive potential that I feel as if you've only begun to tap into. Works like this show progress in growth and development as writer. The way you tie together all of the various components of your vision all throughout the poem is taking things to another level. Anyway, I'm not telling you anything you don't know, so yeah, hah. Thanks for sharing!
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1st Apr 2024 4:55pm
Ah, but you are revealing things I really do not know, lol.
Yes I'm learning to try to tie all parts of the poem together.
A friend told me that to believe my writing has the power to move people
and it will take me places.
Thank you so much for reading!
Yes I'm learning to try to tie all parts of the poem together.
A friend told me that to believe my writing has the power to move people
and it will take me places.
Thank you so much for reading!
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1st Apr 2024 6:14pm