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You Forget
You forget
The all of you
I wanted much too selfishly
To have for mine alone
In such a small world
You became everything
My hopes and dreams
Though I faded from view
But you always knew
And now I do too
Even though I'm gone
And you let others feast
At the table of my dreams
My bed remains mine alone
The all of you
I wanted much too selfishly
To have for mine alone
In such a small world
You became everything
My hopes and dreams
Though I faded from view
But you always knew
And now I do too
Even though I'm gone
And you let others feast
At the table of my dreams
My bed remains mine alone
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Re. You Forget
24th Jan 2024 1:35am
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24th Jan 2024 2:19am
Re. You Forget
24th Jan 2024 3:56am
Dear AJ,
For me, this piece left an impression of lost love and melancholy. The closing stanza has me envisioning a wandering lost soul. I think a lovely coffee cake is needed here. Your writing remains as intact as ever in beautiful emotion and imagery. H🌷
For me, this piece left an impression of lost love and melancholy. The closing stanza has me envisioning a wandering lost soul. I think a lovely coffee cake is needed here. Your writing remains as intact as ever in beautiful emotion and imagery. H🌷
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Re: Re. You Forget
24th Jan 2024 10:52am
Re. You Forget
24th Jan 2024 4:35am
I imagine you made a stand saying you would not share your loved one with another or your bed for that matter... this is a powerful write....
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Re. You Forget
24th Jan 2024 2:30pm
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24th Jan 2024 2:37pm
Re. You Forget
24th Jan 2024 4:34pm
Your l words, especially that last line echo out, clinging to the tendrils of my emotional existence, while leaving a permanent mark upon me ...I'm not surprised that your ink affects me like it does, so long lasting and moving.
The sadness of understanding what needs to be which mixes with a love that once flourished.... is beautifully articulated. The pain of love, dearest J.
I've read and reread.... just incredible ink.
Beyond glad to see you 🦋
Thank you for sharing and for continuing to show me these fine examples of truly excellent writing.... I am such a fan/student.
🌹💙 - B
The sadness of understanding what needs to be which mixes with a love that once flourished.... is beautifully articulated. The pain of love, dearest J.
I've read and reread.... just incredible ink.
Beyond glad to see you 🦋
Thank you for sharing and for continuing to show me these fine examples of truly excellent writing.... I am such a fan/student.
🌹💙 - B
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Re: Re. You Forget
24th Jan 2024 4:54pm
I believe its simply time to pack it in for a while. I'm tired. I believe I'll just focus on me for awhile since that's all I can control.
Thank you for your kindness S. Sorry you caught me in a mood. Its good to see you again. 🌼💙
Thank you for your kindness S. Sorry you caught me in a mood. Its good to see you again. 🌼💙
Re: Re. You Forget
24th Jan 2024 5:04pm
Self care /preservation is nothing to apologize for. Sending out all my best healing wishes and warmest cyber hugs.
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24th Jan 2024 5:26pm
Re. You Forget
25th Jan 2024 2:20pm
Fuck this speaks volumes in a few words. You did a great job showing the pain of pulling back from someone who keeps you sidelined, as a convenience. This is really amazing. Sending good vibes from the cheap seats.
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25th Jan 2024 2:43pm