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Black Lace Moon
Her bronze foggy haunted light
was the splendor of a winter night.
Seen through a black lace of branches.
ornamented with the corpse's of berries.
Stirred my heart with the dark side of merry.
The sky was in a utero of magic
behind it's bedazzled dilated moon.
Fetal snowflakes will be born
in the infant hours, of a dead cold dawn.
Come silent storm,
I already am your willing pawn.
was the splendor of a winter night.
Seen through a black lace of branches.
ornamented with the corpse's of berries.
Stirred my heart with the dark side of merry.
The sky was in a utero of magic
behind it's bedazzled dilated moon.
Fetal snowflakes will be born
in the infant hours, of a dead cold dawn.
Come silent storm,
I already am your willing pawn.
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19th Jan 2024 4:15am
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19th Jan 2024 9:08am
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19th Jan 2024 4:34am
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19th Jan 2024 9:10am
Just checked the window, it should start snowing any minute. Thank you for always supporting me. 🤗
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19th Jan 2024 11:22am
Ooooh, so dark. I could get lost in this :)
My parents live 20 minutes from me. They got over 5.5 feet of snow as of yesterday afternoon. I’m 4’11”. Need I say more?
My parents live 20 minutes from me. They got over 5.5 feet of snow as of yesterday afternoon. I’m 4’11”. Need I say more?
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19th Jan 2024 12:29pm
Omfg!!!! We get a few inches, lol.
I stood on the porch in the dark last night and looked up at the moon, there is a black lace of branches slightly obscuring the view. And my poem was born.
Girl you are like snowed in, I hope your man is with you!
I stood on the porch in the dark last night and looked up at the moon, there is a black lace of branches slightly obscuring the view. And my poem was born.
Girl you are like snowed in, I hope your man is with you!
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19th Jan 2024 5:19pm
I love that! Girl, your view is always so intriguing and stunning.
No, he left yesterday. His flight was delayed by a day tho, that was nice:)
No, he left yesterday. His flight was delayed by a day tho, that was nice:)
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19th Jan 2024 7:39pm
Bet yesterday was a fire 🔥!
Everyone here is so kind to me. I just want people to see the beauty I see.
Everyone here is so kind to me. I just want people to see the beauty I see.
Re. Black Lace Moon
19th Jan 2024 6:52pm
Very dark and scintillating. Almost puts you in the mood to be moved and inspired by the night. Your analogies and metaphors are original, and the depiction of the theme and direction carries a sort of willingness to be compelled by romanticism yet has ominous and foreboding feel to it. It's like your interpretation of such scenery and language is two-fold, in the way you carry the transitions. Anyway, those are just some observations. You're getting much, much more talented in how you use visual language to show emotional disposition. Thanks for sharing!
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19th Jan 2024 7:45pm
I liked the way you described your thoughts. I think I do have a like two fold view, I understand what you mean. Using nature to describe emotion is my specialty, lol. Thank you so very much for the encouragement.
I'm really enjoying writing, I'm very humbled people like it too.
We had a snow globe kind of snow today.
Have a totally great weekend!
I'm really enjoying writing, I'm very humbled people like it too.
We had a snow globe kind of snow today.
Have a totally great weekend!
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20th Jan 2024 3:54pm
Thank you very much, I appreciate you commenting. Hope all is well.
Poem was a step into the night and the moon was fogged yet bright, with sky impending snow - my imagination took flight
Poem was a step into the night and the moon was fogged yet bright, with sky impending snow - my imagination took flight
Re. Black Lace Moon
20th Jan 2024 6:18pm
Ha! You do do the Dark Side so very, very well, Debbie. Your poems drag me inside them, make me feel their every word. Well written. 👍
You should take part in this year's NaPo event.
Much love. 💐
You should take part in this year's NaPo event.
Much love. 💐
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20th Jan 2024 7:21pm
My words want you.....lol
That was such a a nice comment, I truly appreciate it.
Have a great day! 😊
That was such a a nice comment, I truly appreciate it.
Have a great day! 😊
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20th Jan 2024 11:10pm
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21st Jan 2024 8:44am
😊 it's winter, have to go with it, lol
Thank you for reading & nice comment. 🤗
Thank you for reading & nice comment. 🤗