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Safe Haven
Is
this a
safe haven
deep underground
is it deep enough
should we dig deeper, down,
has it been infiltrated
by some moralistic jobsworth
give me a sign, one word's enough,
I'll have 'em macerated
softened up, bring 'em round
with writing n'stuff
then, have 'em drowned
thus saving
this, er..,
biz!
this a
safe haven
deep underground
is it deep enough
should we dig deeper, down,
has it been infiltrated
by some moralistic jobsworth
give me a sign, one word's enough,
I'll have 'em macerated
softened up, bring 'em round
with writing n'stuff
then, have 'em drowned
thus saving
this, er..,
biz!
Published 11th Jan 2024
Author's Note
these have a name - I've forgotten what.
1st line rhymes with last line
2nd line rhymes with 2nd to last
and so on.
Just a technical exercise I guess.
1st line rhymes with last line
2nd line rhymes with 2nd to last
and so on.
Just a technical exercise I guess.
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Anonymous
11th Jan 2024 5:40pm
i didn't realize at first reading what was going on in this until i read your author's note. Now I see it—the syllable count, the rhyming, and the way it almost looks like a mirror image. I like it.
11th Jan 2024 7:10pm
Just an exercise. I think.
Perhaps that's what they are named
" Mirror Image " stuff?
From my point of view it's a good idea to practice
everything (whatever I can manage) in this genre
poetics, rhyming, writing, fixed form etc, etc.
thanks for the visit and comment
Perhaps that's what they are named
" Mirror Image " stuff?
From my point of view it's a good idea to practice
everything (whatever I can manage) in this genre
poetics, rhyming, writing, fixed form etc, etc.
thanks for the visit and comment
