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Make a martyr of me
Cut off my arms
sever my legs
Bound and gagged
as you hang me
all dropped and displayed
Sick centre piece
trophy cabinet
next to Dorian Grey
One has to ask
Fickle are the maggots
picking at those scant few morsels
Corpse husband whistling
The thunder rolls
Caged within lonely days
the dirt I am burried in
sever my legs
Bound and gagged
as you hang me
all dropped and displayed
Sick centre piece
trophy cabinet
next to Dorian Grey
One has to ask
Fickle are the maggots
picking at those scant few morsels
Corpse husband whistling
The thunder rolls
Caged within lonely days
the dirt I am burried in
Published 9th Jan 2024
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13th Jan 2024 9:46pm
OK, this is a deep piece. The centerfold is that fourth stanza. I could take its clothes off all day.
Fickle are the maggots
picking at those scant few morsels
Corpse husband whistling
The thunder rolls
First, I love the slight assonance between morsels and rolls.
But picking it apart...
Maggots are the lowest form of life; the thrive on anything. So for the maggots to be finicky, is quite a powerful statement. The bottom-feeders find the meal beneath them... whoa.
Then the corpse-husband, that's beautiful phrasing too.
Rolling thunder is always ominous, and precedes a coming storm.
You use macabre elements with such killer flair. This was a great piece.
Fickle are the maggots
picking at those scant few morsels
Corpse husband whistling
The thunder rolls
First, I love the slight assonance between morsels and rolls.
But picking it apart...
Maggots are the lowest form of life; the thrive on anything. So for the maggots to be finicky, is quite a powerful statement. The bottom-feeders find the meal beneath them... whoa.
Then the corpse-husband, that's beautiful phrasing too.
Rolling thunder is always ominous, and precedes a coming storm.
You use macabre elements with such killer flair. This was a great piece.
