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Pleasure Principle
The near fatal force of your lips
dislodged my soul,
Banishing ever last chance to flee.
The pound of your heart drips
glossy droplets remaining of me.
Your eyes brilliant fires,
to sensually scorch, centuries deep,
forbidden desires.
Moaning breath is an orgasmic choir.
The apocalypse of inhibition,
drives you hard.
Into my pleasurable oblivion.
Take me all night, make my trembling
naked flesh....your ultimate sin.
dislodged my soul,
Banishing ever last chance to flee.
The pound of your heart drips
glossy droplets remaining of me.
Your eyes brilliant fires,
to sensually scorch, centuries deep,
forbidden desires.
Moaning breath is an orgasmic choir.
The apocalypse of inhibition,
drives you hard.
Into my pleasurable oblivion.
Take me all night, make my trembling
naked flesh....your ultimate sin.
Author's Note
Coffee thoughts 😊
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Re. Pleasure Principle
20th Dec 2023 12:37pm
I think I need to get your coffee brand. This was highly...stimulating. beautifully written!
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20th Dec 2023 12:48pm
Aww thank you.
It was Nature's Promise Breakfast Blend with gingerbread creamer, lol
What's a world without sex and coffee!
Have an amazing day 😊
It was Nature's Promise Breakfast Blend with gingerbread creamer, lol
What's a world without sex and coffee!
Have an amazing day 😊
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17th Feb 2024 00:32am
Beautiful poem.. and best reply ever! I don't know if there's anything better..?? Those are two of my favorite things!
Have another cup for me!
~Christopher
Have another cup for me!
~Christopher
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17th Feb 2024 00:58am
Two of my favorite too.
Thank u for commenting!
Don't get me started with espresso 🔥
Thank u for commenting!
Don't get me started with espresso 🔥
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20th Dec 2023 6:12pm
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20th Dec 2023 11:11pm
Pssst...
ever = every
“The pound of your heart drips glossy droplets remaining of me”
I think you need a transitional word in there somewhere, an article or something :)
Your eyes brilliant fires,
to sensually scorch, centuries deep,
forbidden desires.
Moaning breath is an orgasmic choir.
Again, love the soft hits in rhyme. Fires, desires, choir.
The apocalypse of inhibition,
drives you hard.
Into my pleasurable oblivion.
Take me all night, make my trembling
naked flesh....your ultimate sin.
And also inhibition, oblivion and sin. I like those hits.
SMOKING’ girl! You go with your bad self. I’m in high-nerd form right now, so throw any bad advice out the window and ignore the rest. Great work!
ever = every
“The pound of your heart drips glossy droplets remaining of me”
I think you need a transitional word in there somewhere, an article or something :)
Your eyes brilliant fires,
to sensually scorch, centuries deep,
forbidden desires.
Moaning breath is an orgasmic choir.
Again, love the soft hits in rhyme. Fires, desires, choir.
The apocalypse of inhibition,
drives you hard.
Into my pleasurable oblivion.
Take me all night, make my trembling
naked flesh....your ultimate sin.
And also inhibition, oblivion and sin. I like those hits.
SMOKING’ girl! You go with your bad self. I’m in high-nerd form right now, so throw any bad advice out the window and ignore the rest. Great work!
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21st Dec 2023 00:28am
Hi Betty, you are right girl, I did kinda leave out a word there. Thank you for your feedback. I don't think I hold a candle to any of the erotica on here, I like to try though.
Have a great night!
Have a great night!
Re. Pleasure Principle
20th Dec 2023 11:18pm
Was the coffee piping hot when you were done writing?
Deep rooted desire bubbling to the surface. Enjoyable erotic write, could feel your passion building.
Deep rooted desire bubbling to the surface. Enjoyable erotic write, could feel your passion building.
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21st Dec 2023 00:32am
Oh yes, scalding hot!
Thank you. Erotica is not my strong suit, lol.
I'm glad you enjoyed. 😊
Have a great night!
Thank you. Erotica is not my strong suit, lol.
I'm glad you enjoyed. 😊
Have a great night!
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21st Dec 2023 00:29am
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21st Dec 2023 00:48am
Yup only in principle here, haha
Thank you for checking out, you also, always make me smile. 🤗
Thank you for checking out, you also, always make me smile. 🤗
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Anonymous
21st Dec 2023 2:48pm
Opening lines set the tone. You carried it perfectly through to a fantastic conclusion. Your coffee thoughts are stirring
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21st Dec 2023 4:43pm
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23rd Dec 2023 12:19pm
You need to be taken to be paradise all night and day long. Keep on writing.
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23rd Dec 2023 1:26pm
😊 I know right, I should be in paradise, lol
Thank you for reading - and have happy holidays.
Thank you for reading - and have happy holidays.
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Anonymous
8th Jan 2024 6:56pm
beautifully succinct and sexy.
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8th Jan 2024 7:15pm