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Dark and fractured, I set forth.
Unbelievable confessions
evolve into the origin of obsession.
Unshed tears are an onyx ocean,
sea salted with fears.
Sought by monsters of the deep soul.
Unremembered dreams
tug at sanity's jagged seams.
Pleading, plaguing for recall.
I want to profusely believe,
cry with abandon,
as I remember it all in tandem.
I'm fragile and hard,
Rebuilt from broken shards.
A glitter glue to bind the scars.
Memories remain haunted stars.
Visceral when they occur
Ghostly when they are far.
Unbelievable confessions
evolve into the origin of obsession.
Unshed tears are an onyx ocean,
sea salted with fears.
Sought by monsters of the deep soul.
Unremembered dreams
tug at sanity's jagged seams.
Pleading, plaguing for recall.
I want to profusely believe,
cry with abandon,
as I remember it all in tandem.
I'm fragile and hard,
Rebuilt from broken shards.
A glitter glue to bind the scars.
Memories remain haunted stars.
Visceral when they occur
Ghostly when they are far.
Published 23rd Dec 2023
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23rd Dec 2023 11:59am
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23rd Dec 2023 1:24pm
23rd Dec 2023 1:32pm
I like the excellent combination of words you use to convey your thoughts. 😊
23rd Dec 2023 2:52pm
23rd Dec 2023 9:20pm
A glitter glue to bind the scar?!
That’s fucking brilliant. Best line I’ve read all day. Pretty and sparkly and functional in painful situations.
Good damn stuff!
That’s fucking brilliant. Best line I’ve read all day. Pretty and sparkly and functional in painful situations.
Good damn stuff!
24th Dec 2023 3:18pm
Wow! This one unleased all kinds of emotions for me! It really packs a punch! Whew! I relate to this poem so we'll it's like you were there all my life. Blessing to you! Have a wonderful holiday season!
Love,
Faith
Love,
Faith
24th Dec 2023 4:35pm
I find great happiness in knowing someone like yourself related! Hope your holidays are blessed with magic and peace.
Anonymous
25th Dec 2023 3:14am
The idea of glitter glue on the scars speaks of making beauty of the pain, or covering it with beauty
25th Dec 2023 10:04am
Hi! Sometimes I feel like my whole life is making beauty of the pain, lol. Thank you for your comment. AND 🎄 merry christmas
27th Dec 2023 11:57am
"Rebuilt from broken shards.
A glitter glue to bind the scars."
Such beautiful imagery and relevant to this reader as well.
A glitter glue to bind the scars."
Such beautiful imagery and relevant to this reader as well.
27th Dec 2023 12:18pm
I'm so happy you related, especially those lines - shows resilience. Thank you for reading!
5th Jan 2024 8:38pm
Sounds like a lot of hardship and struggle being expressed here. You seem to find ways to communicate any emotional diversity, be it pain, depression, sorrow, hope, joy, inspiration, etc. I think you're coming a long way in your development. Anyway, that aside, I can feel the descriptive struggle in this, as an unrelenting relativity. It seems as though fate is agonizing at times. Your language is outreaching and universal, at least at the end. It almost reminds me of one of my favorite heavy metal bands, Opeth. Their lyricism has extremely concise and compacted meaning, within transitions. I see a lot of that potential in you, which could be a gift to carry you far and away as an original writer in your own right. The way you use metaphors to communicate emotional conviction and language, as well as logic and transition of theme and direction, is special and unique. Your imagination must be vivid, heh. Anyway, as always, great work. Thanks for sharing!
5th Jan 2024 10:06pm
I am completely humbled.
I'm a chess player. My dad was a master. Before he passed I played.....but sucked, lol. I play all the time online, I don't read books on it and I have vastly improved. I can hold my own against my brother and he's an expert. And all that was, was disciplined practice that made me better.
It's the same with writing. I express emotion well in speech. And since joining this site in under a year I've already written 200 poems. That's a lot of practice. Lol
Thank you from the bottom of my heart for the encouragement, it makes me want to do better.
Oh and my imagination, step inside......if you dare, lol.
I find my best writing is when I fuse emotion with nature & imagination.
I'm a chess player. My dad was a master. Before he passed I played.....but sucked, lol. I play all the time online, I don't read books on it and I have vastly improved. I can hold my own against my brother and he's an expert. And all that was, was disciplined practice that made me better.
It's the same with writing. I express emotion well in speech. And since joining this site in under a year I've already written 200 poems. That's a lot of practice. Lol
Thank you from the bottom of my heart for the encouragement, it makes me want to do better.
Oh and my imagination, step inside......if you dare, lol.
I find my best writing is when I fuse emotion with nature & imagination.
