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Love
Met him after many years
he had the same sun in his eyes
that I had last seen,
he turned away when he saw me
N I wanted to swallow that sun...
N still my eyes were roaming
in the same darkness of love...
Suddenly stormy clouds
gathered and the bombardment
of rain started from the sky...
Now I could see the
blueness and brightness in his eyes,
I know him very well n so felt that
he wanted to give me a luminous hug...
Now tears filled with love started flowing from the eyes of both of us, the past time started revolving around us, a stormy gust came and it ran away with a ridiculous amount of time...
he had the same sun in his eyes
that I had last seen,
he turned away when he saw me
N I wanted to swallow that sun...
N still my eyes were roaming
in the same darkness of love...
Suddenly stormy clouds
gathered and the bombardment
of rain started from the sky...
Now I could see the
blueness and brightness in his eyes,
I know him very well n so felt that
he wanted to give me a luminous hug...
Now tears filled with love started flowing from the eyes of both of us, the past time started revolving around us, a stormy gust came and it ran away with a ridiculous amount of time...
Published 23rd Jul 2023
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23rd Jul 2023 6:57am
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23rd Jul 2023 8:02am
Imaginary poems are fun to write but I still believe there is at least a "seed" in the imagination that results in the writing. This is powerful with emotion and metaphorical with the storm. This reads like a very happy time yet with perhaps a tinge of grey to it as well. Not sorrow necessarily, just bittersweet. Great write! Enjoyed. Your skills shine :) Sometimes I like to write a good dark poem and it freaks some people out because they take it so literally when I am just having fun but even with those I suppose there IS that "seed" in my imagination with my dark poems as well :) Hope you are doing well HUGS
23rd Jul 2023 8:49am
Yes.. the seed has definitely been sown, of a feeling and of an incompleteness, due to which this poem has been created. I hope you will also be fine.. I have written this inspired by your poem "was about to SUN".. Thank you very much my friend...Your poems are always different and I try to read them. Well Have fun!!.
23rd Jul 2023 12:56pm
Loved this. Liked your phrase "Now tears filled with love started flowing from the eyes of both of us."
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25th Jul 2023 2:58pm
Nice work.
Suddenly it reminds of Paul Simon's song "Still Crazy After All These Years"
https://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/paulsimon/stillcrazyafteralltheseyears.html
Suddenly it reminds of Paul Simon's song "Still Crazy After All These Years"
https://www.azlyrics.com/lyrics/paulsimon/stillcrazyafteralltheseyears.html
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30th Jul 2023 3:07pm
Definitely you have an art to throw words on reader's mind and paint on them differently
30th Jul 2023 3:27pm
