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Just want One
The street is narrow walk on through
Tight measures, walking right on through
The leash is tight lets stop it now
The record stopped the music sound
The intervention was announced
A human naked was rennounced
Its so hard to make love, i just want one, i just want one
Chorus::So fade away into the night
There you will find the acolytes
The holy spirit knows the way
You ll just pay as you go and stay
For heaven was for those who pray
I hope you find your love one day
The one love that we all wish for
Is hidden beneath our favourite crone
And its bidding on our gold to rise
As well as a million dollar signs
Now that i feel lineal
I ll find your heart resilient
And manifest a magick number
To produce an Act for the slumber
Tight measures, walking right on through
The leash is tight lets stop it now
The record stopped the music sound
The intervention was announced
A human naked was rennounced
Its so hard to make love, i just want one, i just want one
Chorus::So fade away into the night
There you will find the acolytes
The holy spirit knows the way
You ll just pay as you go and stay
For heaven was for those who pray
I hope you find your love one day
The one love that we all wish for
Is hidden beneath our favourite crone
And its bidding on our gold to rise
As well as a million dollar signs
Now that i feel lineal
I ll find your heart resilient
And manifest a magick number
To produce an Act for the slumber
Published 21st Jul 2023
Author's Note
It's about a prisoner , trying to escape from his false conviction
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22nd Jul 2023 4:45pm
I like your way of writing, and the results. You have great vision for what is worth writing down.
Honest critique; A few lines are choppy, without commas or line breaks. It causes a stutter to the reading. But, you write really well, so little bumps are not hindrances to your writes at all.
This is a very rewarding write for me to read. Again, you are a good writer!
Honest critique; A few lines are choppy, without commas or line breaks. It causes a stutter to the reading. But, you write really well, so little bumps are not hindrances to your writes at all.
This is a very rewarding write for me to read. Again, you are a good writer!
27th Sep 2023 7:20am
You are right, I am a Screen media writer, I have forgotten my key types, like commas and lines, but I'm glad you where rewarded by this, I'm looking forward in reading some of your writes, thank you for liking it!
