Monster

I love “a codeine of bliss’s”
And how you ended the poem with rhyme.
Looking forward to more!

Thank you. I like the codeine part too. Who doesn't like codeine, lol. I tried to stick to a rhyme.
Thx for checking out

Nicely penned db… engaging

Thank you my friend!

Very nice.  A visual and meaningful course of direction.  The aesthetical punch you pack in some of these lines is really well done.  Very creative metaphors, taken in an almost alchemic transition.  "Ferocious feral kisses, a codeine of bliss's, devour my fears that crave entrance to the light. The moon of my heart, a blinding euphoria electric bright" - just how that's described unfolds in an experience that's relatable. but maintains your own personal depiction.  As it goes to the narrative's lover leaving, the body of work ends in a captured cycle of emotion or disposition.  Good job at conveying feelings and attitudes, from beginning to end.  Thanks for sharing.

Thank you for all the feedback. You made my day. 😊
I'd like to write a continuation to this.
If I told you how I came up with this you'd laugh, story for another day.
I appreciate your comments so very much.

This is very much my style and I am loving it. The care you take in crafting each line is clearly visible, which adds to the intensity of the poem. Every emotion was driven in very very deep. A fantastic write indeed!

Why thank you very much! I do contemplate my choice of words obsessively until it is identical to the emotion or aesthetic. I'm glad you liked it. I value your opinion very much as I love your style. Hoping there will be a part 2.

Well, I'm hooked.

😊- thank you.
You made me smile!

It's impossible sometimes to stave off such overwhelming lust, so annoying! Nice write, love, describes the sentiment perfectly

Yup. Lust has it's way, lol.
Thx so much for checking out. 🤗

Always! You're awesome!

The feelings mutual. 😊
Enjoy your night. 🌙

I like it very much.

Hey you! Thank you. I'm working on part two.
Have a great night.