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Dispersed
My touch promises feast to your famished lips.
Parched, my inhibition slips.
Yearning on the cusp of flesh's collision.
Never existed a decision.
Dispersed is a need greater than the limits of this one fragile world.
Even eternity is an insufficient word.
Pressed against your chest I hear the familiar thump of forever.
From every molecule of sadness, my soul is severed.
To be kissed by you is my favorite endeavor.
Parched, my inhibition slips.
Yearning on the cusp of flesh's collision.
Never existed a decision.
Dispersed is a need greater than the limits of this one fragile world.
Even eternity is an insufficient word.
Pressed against your chest I hear the familiar thump of forever.
From every molecule of sadness, my soul is severed.
To be kissed by you is my favorite endeavor.
Published 20th Jun 2023
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Anonymous
- Edited 28th Mar 2025 1:50am
21st Jun 2023 1:06pm
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I love when I can make someone feel good.
I feel like the life position I'm in, now is the time to write, to push myself to unknown limits.
I think our hearts think alike 😊
I feel like the life position I'm in, now is the time to write, to push myself to unknown limits.
I think our hearts think alike 😊
Anonymous
- Edited 28th Mar 2025 1:50am
21st Jun 2023 1:46pm
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22nd Jun 2023 2:44am
This seems to be a strong point in your impassioned desire and pursuit of craftsmanship with the pen. It is pretty erotic and intimate. I really like how the comparisons and analogies you draw come straight from the heart, or longing to be in love. Pretty graphic and descriptive, and the whole purpose of "what" and "why" is a stronghold of your expression here. Anyway, hope this helps.
Hi again! You read me very well. I've always worn my heart on my sleeve. And I do long to fall in love. Right now I only have imagination and memories to draw upon.
Your feedback means the world to me. 💜
I'm super impressed with your understanding of the mechanics of poetry, and your delivery of feedback is so descriptive. I know what I feel when I read another's poem, I wish I could express my opinion so eloquently. I think I fear interpreting something way different than what was meant by the words, lol. But that is the beauty of poetry, each person may take away something different.
Your feedback means the world to me. 💜
I'm super impressed with your understanding of the mechanics of poetry, and your delivery of feedback is so descriptive. I know what I feel when I read another's poem, I wish I could express my opinion so eloquently. I think I fear interpreting something way different than what was meant by the words, lol. But that is the beauty of poetry, each person may take away something different.
22nd Jun 2023 12:26pm
This poem has the feel of that song by The Corrs, called 'Breathless' about temptation & taking that opportunity to unite. 😊
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