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Luminaria of Love - Rewrite
Luminaria of Love
She still remembers the night
the moon rose over Esplanade Avenue
with its light penetrating her soul
deeper than the sun on a hot summer’s day.
She stands at the ivy gate to heaven
looking up at the ghostly trees
bearded in Spanish moss.
Love creeps like ivy
through the garden of her heart.
The promise of entwinement
knots in her breast.
Luna’s ray sneaks into the keyhole
to the door of her soul
behind which secret love hides.
His ring finger is a moon ray
that touches the rosebud of her chin
until she blossoms into an evening primrose
When her blush comes unbidden
by the moonlight caress of her lover
her dress a hothouse
for skin that swarms like luna moths in love
that climb her trellis of moonbeams
whose grail is her perfume ghost
that haunts the lambent lunar lattice
She still remembers the night
the moon rose over Esplanade Avenue
with its light penetrating her soul
deeper than the sun on a hot summer’s day.
She stands at the ivy gate to heaven
looking up at the ghostly trees
bearded in Spanish moss.
Love creeps like ivy
through the garden of her heart.
The promise of entwinement
knots in her breast.
Luna’s ray sneaks into the keyhole
to the door of her soul
behind which secret love hides.
His ring finger is a moon ray
that touches the rosebud of her chin
until she blossoms into an evening primrose
When her blush comes unbidden
by the moonlight caress of her lover
her dress a hothouse
for skin that swarms like luna moths in love
that climb her trellis of moonbeams
whose grail is her perfume ghost
that haunts the lambent lunar lattice
Published 14th May 2023
| Edited 15th May 2023
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14th May 2023 3:30am
This is beautiful, tender, soft and sensual, with a touch of melancholy, all at the same time.
"Love creeps like ivy,
through the garden of her heart."
Such a vivid image. Love is a very powerful emotion.
Your thoughts caress gently around me. ❤️
"Love creeps like ivy,
through the garden of her heart."
Such a vivid image. Love is a very powerful emotion.
Your thoughts caress gently around me. ❤️
14th May 2023 3:52am
Love that my poem caressed your inner heart, my friend. Indeed poetry can do that. Adire that those liens felt so emotional for you. You have given me the gift of your appreciation. For that, I am eternally grateful.
John ❤️
John ❤️
14th May 2023 6:33am
Dear J,
I very much enjoyed this poem. Your use of nature and moonlight mixing with emotions of love and seduction were tantalizing and gently let the reader take the conclusion where they wanted. The imagery is so vivid throughout the write I felt like I knew exactly where you were writing about despite the fact I know I’ve never been in the mentioned street😊
Lovely piece. H🌷
I very much enjoyed this poem. Your use of nature and moonlight mixing with emotions of love and seduction were tantalizing and gently let the reader take the conclusion where they wanted. The imagery is so vivid throughout the write I felt like I knew exactly where you were writing about despite the fact I know I’ve never been in the mentioned street😊
Lovely piece. H🌷
14th May 2023 10:59am
Dear Honoria,
Love your observations here the resonate with the core of this poem. Adore that my use of nature imagery and sensually mixed really worked for you my friend. This poem went through many rewrites to arrive where it is. I am most grateful for you reading the finished poem in its full blossom. Thank you so much for your gorgeous words on my poem.
John
Love your observations here the resonate with the core of this poem. Adore that my use of nature imagery and sensually mixed really worked for you my friend. This poem went through many rewrites to arrive where it is. I am most grateful for you reading the finished poem in its full blossom. Thank you so much for your gorgeous words on my poem.
John
14th May 2023 10:01am
There's such magic and this preternatural essence of dreamy wonder which you conjure so extraordinarily well that the imagery almost crosses over from your richly described netherworld into our physical one , via your talented pen. I was completely taken in by the depth of love and the idea of it transcending any realm... It's so perfectly romantic and beautifully swoon worthy.... sigh...
You inadvertently make us better readers and writers with such tremendous writing examples as this, John
Thank you for creating a space that I always know I'll deeply enjoy visiting and learning learning from.
Much love, dear one.
🌹💙
-S
You inadvertently make us better readers and writers with such tremendous writing examples as this, John
Thank you for creating a space that I always know I'll deeply enjoy visiting and learning learning from.
Much love, dear one.
🌹💙
-S
Susan,
I relish your words on the romanticism in this poem which is what i strove to give it. Love that you were taken by the imagery and that it expanded your world as a writer and reader. There is nothing better than reading your verse and cherishing the beauty of your poetry and comments. Each time you delve into my poems I feel the warmth and grace of your pen. You are a poet extraordinaire whose poetic comments are as gorgeous as your poetry itself. When you add my poems to your RL my heart flutters like a butterfly in your sunshine.
Love to you my darling,
John
I relish your words on the romanticism in this poem which is what i strove to give it. Love that you were taken by the imagery and that it expanded your world as a writer and reader. There is nothing better than reading your verse and cherishing the beauty of your poetry and comments. Each time you delve into my poems I feel the warmth and grace of your pen. You are a poet extraordinaire whose poetic comments are as gorgeous as your poetry itself. When you add my poems to your RL my heart flutters like a butterfly in your sunshine.
Love to you my darling,
John
