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Spoken Word
Spoken words hide wisdom under their wing,
linguistics of the unique intelligence,
simple closed minds would think irrelevant.
abstract painted pictures through the words of aged empathy,
I grew Tired of asking what feelings really mean...
linguistics of the unique intelligence,
simple closed minds would think irrelevant.
abstract painted pictures through the words of aged empathy,
I grew Tired of asking what feelings really mean...
Published 14th Apr 2012
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14th Apr 2012 7:46pm
14th Apr 2012 7:55pm
I definitely like this. Each word leads very nicely to the next. The last line is flawless, as the best last lines are. My one gripe, as there always is one!.. 'abstract painted pictures' drops me out of it a little. I almost want to read it as 'painted pictures abstract through the words of aged empathy' as it puts a clever little twist on it, but this is only a suggestion, and every set of eyes craves for something a little different. Anyhow... Well bloody done!
