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The load, the click
The pen lays
inside my palms
sliding deep in
my pockets
there is a fire
burning slowly;
deep furnaces
longing to appear
as stains on paper
for another eye
to glance upon,
they come
in crescendos
of car crashes
striking down
each lesson
as it goes
because life
isn't a scene
of moments
filled with
beauty or
nostalgia,
this pen
in my pocket
isn't beautiful
every rage
lays inside
a chamber
waiting for
my thumb
to push
down.
Published 8th May 2023
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8th May 2023 8:44pm
I believe our soul has chambers that hold our raging secrets.
Keep up the stunning writing.
Keep up the stunning writing.
12th May 2023 2:35am
Hello Delila
I very much agree with you there and I appreciate your kind and supporting words you have left there, I hope you are being lovely to yourself.
Kind Regards
-A
I very much agree with you there and I appreciate your kind and supporting words you have left there, I hope you are being lovely to yourself.
Kind Regards
-A
9th May 2023 00:33am
I have Saliva blazing in my head right now, "Click, Click, BOOM."
Good goddamn this is fucking flawless. Your brevity of verbiage with your complexity of thought is absolutely stellar shit. I admire the simmering antipathy, and your execution. If Charles Bukowski and Sylvia Plath had a baby, she'd probably write a lot like you.
12th May 2023 2:43am
Hello Betty
I do love a bit of Saliva tick tick boom is actually my favourite of theirs too, good music taste as well as good words.
I'm glad you picked up on the complexity and antipathy in this poem, not many people like to point out what they think or see in a poem so i'm thrilled there's some creatures on here who actually do take a step out of the zone.
Your closing comment made me laugh greatly haha, I may possibly change my bio now, thank you so much for that it made me laugh and smile :)
Kind Regards
-A
I do love a bit of Saliva tick tick boom is actually my favourite of theirs too, good music taste as well as good words.
I'm glad you picked up on the complexity and antipathy in this poem, not many people like to point out what they think or see in a poem so i'm thrilled there's some creatures on here who actually do take a step out of the zone.
Your closing comment made me laugh greatly haha, I may possibly change my bio now, thank you so much for that it made me laugh and smile :)
Kind Regards
-A
9th May 2023 11:03am
12th May 2023 2:46am
Hello James
I appreciate you saw the truth in this write as many people would go overlooking or avoiding it, i'm glad to see that some people out there have the same call, thank you for reading and commenting.
Kind Regards
-A
I appreciate you saw the truth in this write as many people would go overlooking or avoiding it, i'm glad to see that some people out there have the same call, thank you for reading and commenting.
Kind Regards
-A
10th May 2023 3:41am
Your writing has a soulful, denuded honesty that is impacting and resonant.
11th May 2023 10:51am
Love the click
Was obsessed with my Parker Pen for years.
I gave them as presents to people who respected the notion still of pen and paper.
BIG
Was obsessed with my Parker Pen for years.
I gave them as presents to people who respected the notion still of pen and paper.
BIG
13th May 2023 2:48am
Alas your pen is beautiful...
A weapon wielded wonderfully...
Talent is obvious,
Regards,
BITS
A weapon wielded wonderfully...
Talent is obvious,
Regards,
BITS
