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Spun From God's Weave - with Deliabear
Touch me in the twilight,
below the moon's glowing halo.
Our breath stains the night
with silver condensation.
Beneath a quilt of sparkling dew.
Touch me with your soul and be,
against the swooning willow tree.
In autumns long sleeve sweater
Falling, cascading are the leaves,
through my dreams a gentle breeze.
A fabric of stars spun from God's weave.
below the moon's glowing halo.
Our breath stains the night
with silver condensation.
Beneath a quilt of sparkling dew.
Touch me with your soul and be,
against the swooning willow tree.
In autumns long sleeve sweater
Falling, cascading are the leaves,
through my dreams a gentle breeze.
A fabric of stars spun from God's weave.
Published 3rd May 2023
Author's Note
Deliabear made this poem possible.
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3rd May 2023 6:06am
Dear A and D,
Congratulations. This is lovely uplifting collaboration. Your blended voices are very well suited. I enjoyed the gentle tenor of this poem. H🌷
Congratulations. This is lovely uplifting collaboration. Your blended voices are very well suited. I enjoyed the gentle tenor of this poem. H🌷
3rd May 2023 11:17am
3rd May 2023 1:15pm
With D, you are always going to get a lift. She writes well without the sheet music.
3rd May 2023 6:41am
3rd May 2023 11:18am
3rd May 2023 1:17pm
3rd May 2023 11:42pm
Yeah, the talent on display here is very clear. The metaphors, direction, and theme come to life with creative imagination, collaboration, and expression. Very original use of vocabulary - both definitive and visual. It invokes an excitement within. Definitely unique and holds its own. Anyway, I already critiqued on her profile, without realizing both profiles had it displayed. I'm still new to the site. Anyway, all of what I said on her profile applies here with adagio. Awesomely inspirational.
4th May 2023 00:01am
