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His Eyes
His eyes
said it was time.
In his eyes I saw pleasure
mixed with regret.
said it was time.
In his eyes I saw pleasure
mixed with regret.
Published 23rd Apr 2023
Author's Note
What I saw in a lover's eyes.
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23rd Apr 2023 7:15pm
23rd Apr 2023 7:41pm
Dear S,
Rookie question, is this a particular style of poem? What is it called? I really like these short poems that capture a specific event or feeling.
Rookie question, is this a particular style of poem? What is it called? I really like these short poems that capture a specific event or feeling.
23rd Apr 2023 9:03pm
could be a senryu - 5-7-5 - go to the haiku playground
His eyes said it's time.
In his eyes I saw pleasure
mixed with his regret.
or an epigram - if you feel wry and cynical:
His eyes said surprise.
As I saw them devise
More pure, manly lies
His eyes said it's time.
In his eyes I saw pleasure
mixed with his regret.
or an epigram - if you feel wry and cynical:
His eyes said surprise.
As I saw them devise
More pure, manly lies
24th Apr 2023 12:40pm
24th Apr 2023 6:10pm
23rd Apr 2023 7:47pm
Leaves to reader's imagination what the pleasure was and the regret was for.
24th Apr 2023 12:42pm
I suspect the pleasure was his arriving physical climax. I think his mind was on his wife and he felt some regret.
24th Apr 2023 00:33am
Anonymous
- Edited 2nd Jul 2023 5:45pm
25th Apr 2023 4:24am
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