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Nobody Looks up anymore
The Chaos Magnet begs a return,
as my life rusts, his lust burns.
He says we should attend oblivion as VIP’s,
that it’s time to reignite my well forgotten dreams.
He swears that I carry defeat in my posture,
too much playing it safe, getting fat on good order.
He claims that I once held the world in my palm,
that I sang in punches, I was a Ric Flair, the man.
He states “ You’ve played your hand, it’s time I played mine,
you’re but a drunk playing sober, so please drop the mime”
He complains that nobody looks up anymore, no one dares to be great,
all of us tempered with bruised hearts, resigned to bland fates.
He bellows that I bring the rain but he’ll bring the storm,
he’ll show me the rhyme and the reason that all of us are born.
The key is to dance, without fear of the stare
because if nobody is looking, then nobody cares
Nobody looks up anymore...
as my life rusts, his lust burns.
He says we should attend oblivion as VIP’s,
that it’s time to reignite my well forgotten dreams.
He swears that I carry defeat in my posture,
too much playing it safe, getting fat on good order.
He claims that I once held the world in my palm,
that I sang in punches, I was a Ric Flair, the man.
He states “ You’ve played your hand, it’s time I played mine,
you’re but a drunk playing sober, so please drop the mime”
He complains that nobody looks up anymore, no one dares to be great,
all of us tempered with bruised hearts, resigned to bland fates.
He bellows that I bring the rain but he’ll bring the storm,
he’ll show me the rhyme and the reason that all of us are born.
The key is to dance, without fear of the stare
because if nobody is looking, then nobody cares
Nobody looks up anymore...
Published 22nd Apr 2023
Author's Note
My alter ego, Chaos Magnet, still lurks inside me. Every now and again he looks to take over the wheel.
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22nd Apr 2023 2:15pm
22nd Apr 2023 2:29pm
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22nd Apr 2023 4:47pm
Hi Cathedral,
Ya, hard to argue with that, we are in strange times, no doubt about it. Thanks for listening and sharing you thoughts.
Regards,
BITS
Ya, hard to argue with that, we are in strange times, no doubt about it. Thanks for listening and sharing you thoughts.
Regards,
BITS
22nd Apr 2023 4:38pm
I love this one in particular, it reminds me of Pagliacci, the sad clown, my grandmother had pictures of sad clowns on her walls, the contradiction of the festive makeup with the sad, drawn expression of the face and eyes was fascinating to me emotion there I had not yet experienced in the fullness of time. Your work is so moving, its hard to express.
22nd Apr 2023 4:52pm
Hi Daniel, hope you are well,
The clown persona is intriguing isn't it. The contradictions it advertises.
Thanks for your kind words,you are always uplifting to others. A kind soul in you,me thinks!
Regards,
BITS
The clown persona is intriguing isn't it. The contradictions it advertises.
Thanks for your kind words,you are always uplifting to others. A kind soul in you,me thinks!
Regards,
BITS
23rd Apr 2023 2:01pm
23rd Apr 2023 2:48pm
Hi Her,
Thanking you for dropping by, strange times is being kind if we are truthful, speed of change now is unsustainable, will we recognise ourselves in a year? It is daunting.. the creative world will survive but it will be changed. Appreciate you giving me a listen,
Regards,
BITS
Thanking you for dropping by, strange times is being kind if we are truthful, speed of change now is unsustainable, will we recognise ourselves in a year? It is daunting.. the creative world will survive but it will be changed. Appreciate you giving me a listen,
Regards,
BITS
Hello BITS
I admire the honesty in your poem and how you present the inner fear most humans have about doing great things for whatever reason that may be, I concur with above comments about the clown persona because it can serve many ideas and many sides along with the contradictions that go along with it, it's funny because clown persona is often a way of disconnecting from the human and allows us to say what's truly on the mind so it's interesting you took this route in your poetry video which works incredibly well with the underlying theme of fear since clowns are often terrifying for many people out there, you also chose mime as well as a clownlike persona which is being unable to speak while using only your body for expression, it further clarifies that fear of people expressing themselves truly or doing what they truly want in their lives and how deeply instilled that can be and gives more depth to your poem rather than simply reciting your words to the camera.
This was a very creative and open poem with many routes to explore, i'll take it with me.
Kind Regards
-A
I admire the honesty in your poem and how you present the inner fear most humans have about doing great things for whatever reason that may be, I concur with above comments about the clown persona because it can serve many ideas and many sides along with the contradictions that go along with it, it's funny because clown persona is often a way of disconnecting from the human and allows us to say what's truly on the mind so it's interesting you took this route in your poetry video which works incredibly well with the underlying theme of fear since clowns are often terrifying for many people out there, you also chose mime as well as a clownlike persona which is being unable to speak while using only your body for expression, it further clarifies that fear of people expressing themselves truly or doing what they truly want in their lives and how deeply instilled that can be and gives more depth to your poem rather than simply reciting your words to the camera.
This was a very creative and open poem with many routes to explore, i'll take it with me.
Kind Regards
-A
25th Apr 2023 2:16pm
Hi Neves,
Thanks for dropping by. Much appreciation for the insightful and perceptive comments. You are kind with your precious time. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Regards,
BITS
Thanks for dropping by. Much appreciation for the insightful and perceptive comments. You are kind with your precious time. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Regards,
BITS
2nd May 2023 11:33pm
Why thank you Kunoichi !
Thanks for listening and commenting. I will return the compliment on my next sit down.
Regards,
BITS
Thanks for listening and commenting. I will return the compliment on my next sit down.
Regards,
BITS
