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tranquility
i listened
as the crickets
serenaded me
into
a deep slumber,
or maybe
it was caused
by the raindrops
playing
on the old
tin roof.
as the crickets
serenaded me
into
a deep slumber,
or maybe
it was caused
by the raindrops
playing
on the old
tin roof.
Published 18th Apr 2023
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18th Apr 2023 5:58am
18th Apr 2023 6:05am
18th Apr 2023 5:58am
Dear J,
Gorgeous. This poem has an incredible amount of imagery that brings back many memories of a tin roof at my grandmothers and the crickets in the summer. It was always amazing to me how something so small could make such a loud sound. Lovely write. H🌷
Gorgeous. This poem has an incredible amount of imagery that brings back many memories of a tin roof at my grandmothers and the crickets in the summer. It was always amazing to me how something so small could make such a loud sound. Lovely write. H🌷
18th Apr 2023 6:07am
thank you Honoria, this was one of many summer night thoughts from a long ago childhood of mine.
18th Apr 2023 5:58am
18th Apr 2023 11:42am
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18th Apr 2023 12:47pm
I love the terse economy of this gorgeous little poem. It has the feel of something zen, the haiku-like sense of it. Definitely impressive. You’ve found a voice that works for you.
Delightful! Ain’t you glad you stuck around! Ty, my friend.
Delightful! Ain’t you glad you stuck around! Ty, my friend.
18th Apr 2023 12:54pm
