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Urgency of the Blizzard
Not even sure if this rhythm between
my thorax and lips counts as breathing
Eyes slub white of the skies
onto heart’hed carpet,
where stitched sinew will weave
infernal limits of our mortal limbs
Bogarted by biography baggage
of all the poetry joints, she walked into here,
began slinging ice and lemon o’er bitter embers
Kindle is not exclusive for reading on trains.
Suburban Phoenix stocks supermarket shelves
with nectar for gravel-voiced sirens, shopped
twin-flamed from a double-barrel shotgun, trigger
Soon,
aching flakes in blood-lit dark
dot spaces to top of staircases,
amber street light cracks snow-globes
tiny arms ready to embrace love’s longing,
Gentle breeze tumbles minute book shelf
pen waits to be unsheathed, cursor closes,
rage of the page, sun streamed chapters,
our eclipse is merely an ellipsis away
Thumbprints on coastal path
leave braille trails in the snow,
touch the land and feel
my whispers on your skin
my thorax and lips counts as breathing
Eyes slub white of the skies
onto heart’hed carpet,
where stitched sinew will weave
infernal limits of our mortal limbs
Bogarted by biography baggage
of all the poetry joints, she walked into here,
began slinging ice and lemon o’er bitter embers
Kindle is not exclusive for reading on trains.
Suburban Phoenix stocks supermarket shelves
with nectar for gravel-voiced sirens, shopped
twin-flamed from a double-barrel shotgun, trigger
Soon,
aching flakes in blood-lit dark
dot spaces to top of staircases,
amber street light cracks snow-globes
tiny arms ready to embrace love’s longing,
Gentle breeze tumbles minute book shelf
pen waits to be unsheathed, cursor closes,
rage of the page, sun streamed chapters,
our eclipse is merely an ellipsis away
Thumbprints on coastal path
leave braille trails in the snow,
touch the land and feel
my whispers on your skin
Written by
Strangeways_Rob
Published 8th Mar 2023
Author's Note
Brainstorming whilst watching a snow blizzard take shape from the window. Unedited. Funny how quick a little rain clears the streets and turns the floor to slush.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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The author encourages honest critique.
Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
8th Mar 2023 9:56pm
Oh fuck! Fuck you for the first three lies. I wish to shit I’d written them and I’m so damn jealous I could scream!
And Casablanca? Holy shit in a bucket. This was the best damn thing I’ve read in a hot minute. Your sense of pacing and the unraveling of the story, the noir underlay was brilliant.
Brilliant.
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Re: Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
9th Mar 2023 10:40am
'Holy shit in a bucket.' Lol. I could do with a few of them in my kitchen. Many thanks Betty. Pleased someone picked up the Casablanca reference. Your presence on my page is appreciated. Rob
Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
Anonymous
8th Mar 2023 11:41pm
Not even sure if this rhythm between
my thorax and lips counts as breathing
It doesn't... but being human...we must
You ever hung out at a place too long and thought maybe you should leave...but you have that feeling that if you do you might miss something...big?
Oh how I love snow globes...they remind me how much I love snow.
Close the browser and turn off the lights I will shine the armor while you sleep...
(I used to always use ellipses...funny how they have returned....kind of like a to be continued)
I need to dry my floors
my thorax and lips counts as breathing
It doesn't... but being human...we must
You ever hung out at a place too long and thought maybe you should leave...but you have that feeling that if you do you might miss something...big?
Oh how I love snow globes...they remind me how much I love snow.
Close the browser and turn off the lights I will shine the armor while you sleep...
(I used to always use ellipses...funny how they have returned....kind of like a to be continued)
I need to dry my floors
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Re: Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
9th Mar 2023 10:46am
Been thinking of building my own snow globe. There;s a vacancy for a tiny librarian. Fancy it L?
I've been looking for spaces in the wrong places. Funny how the universe rearranges her furniture. Adorable thanks. Rob
I've been looking for spaces in the wrong places. Funny how the universe rearranges her furniture. Adorable thanks. Rob
Re: Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
Anonymous
9th Mar 2023 1:44pm
You ARE adorable. So is the snow globe village
Librarian? I bet you have great books ❤️
Librarian? I bet you have great books ❤️
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Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
Your opening stanzas have a sense of anthropomorphic alchemy, to truly embody the writing. I love the image of snowflakes dotting spaces in particular that's an exquisite sensibility. Immediately following, the cracked snow globe, its like the world has shrunk to fragile proportions, overshadowed by vast longing. You have such a terrific command of the mind's eye image. Thumbprints and braille, imbued presence in such subtle proportion. Its wonderful writing Rob.
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Re: Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
Anonymous
9th Mar 2023 2:25am
Daniel. It's by far one of his best. Sorry to hijack this comment but I am in awe of this piece and your perception. I keep going back and forth between his words and your comment. It's a beautiful journey 😊
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Re: Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
9th Mar 2023 5:52am
I concur Lori. Its my pleasure to experience the writing and offer a valued insight. 💖🙏🏻 Members should discuss the writing more in the comments.
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Re: Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
9th Mar 2023 10:48am
It's the few - like your good self my friend - who make it worthwhile posting on here. Many thanks DC. Rob
Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
9th Mar 2023 4:47am
Dear R,
All I know is between your poem and the above comments I am NOT worthy! When it rains or snows by me, you know what I don’t do? I don’t write awesome poetry! Start to finish this piece was incredible. Every line had purpose and such imagery. I wanted to pick out a favorite line but I noticed my copy paste included the entire write.
H🌷
All I know is between your poem and the above comments I am NOT worthy! When it rains or snows by me, you know what I don’t do? I don’t write awesome poetry! Start to finish this piece was incredible. Every line had purpose and such imagery. I wanted to pick out a favorite line but I noticed my copy paste included the entire write.
H🌷
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Re: Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
9th Mar 2023 10:51am
Your kindness and enthusiasm all over this site is a delight H. Many (myself included) could learn a lot from your positive presence, Rob
Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
10th Mar 2023 3:58am
A snow blizzard...
It was 86 degrees here today. And the pollen was a Martian molecule invasion.
There's like six Floridians active in this site. We're a gang. Lol. So I'm pretty sure they can vouch for the Martian spores part!
But, more importantly, your write.
Outstanding. I want to say "professional", because you write with such precise pieces. This is primo poetry.
I know not everyone is into the same type of writing, or authors, etc. But, you are a definite standard that anyone can read, and use your stuff as a template for great writes.
It is so well done, Rob.
It was 86 degrees here today. And the pollen was a Martian molecule invasion.
There's like six Floridians active in this site. We're a gang. Lol. So I'm pretty sure they can vouch for the Martian spores part!
But, more importantly, your write.
Outstanding. I want to say "professional", because you write with such precise pieces. This is primo poetry.
I know not everyone is into the same type of writing, or authors, etc. But, you are a definite standard that anyone can read, and use your stuff as a template for great writes.
It is so well done, Rob.
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Re: Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
10th Mar 2023 10:22am
British folk spend half our days talking about the weather. The other half we wonder why we are not talking about the weather. 86 degrees! Jeez. I may even be tempted to roll my trouser legs up at that heat.
As always, many thanks for the kind comments. Like all the arts, poetic taste is subjective I guess. I write for enjoyment and cathartic starting blocks and see where the words travel. If they resonate with a handful, then that's pretty cool. Diolch mate.
As always, many thanks for the kind comments. Like all the arts, poetic taste is subjective I guess. I write for enjoyment and cathartic starting blocks and see where the words travel. If they resonate with a handful, then that's pretty cool. Diolch mate.
Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
10th Mar 2023 10:24am
Gentle breeze tumbles minute book shelf
pen waits to be unsheathed, cursor closes,
nice lines. attracted me.
pen waits to be unsheathed, cursor closes,
nice lines. attracted me.
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Re: Re. Urgency of the Blizzard
10th Mar 2023 10:59am