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Forty Four Words of Vital Statistics
Arithmetic of their resuscitated hearts
Extract roots of serpentine secrecy,
Multiplies her lover’s passion
Ethylene twilight divides flame into bone,
For everything sacred has been written
When water loses her noise
Cortege of caves crumble,
We will say only this -
We survived to love
Extract roots of serpentine secrecy,
Multiplies her lover’s passion
Ethylene twilight divides flame into bone,
For everything sacred has been written
When water loses her noise
Cortege of caves crumble,
We will say only this -
We survived to love
Published 1st Mar 2023
Author's Note
For my life, my God, I'm singing. Have to give blood later, I should probably just take this keyboard. Happy St David's Day for any who give a flying fuck.
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Anonymous
1st Mar 2023 11:17am
I give a flying fuck what Today is 💞
44....still such a random number. LOL
Random should have an 8 in them you know
Arithmetic of their resuscitated hearts
I suck at math but I am sometimes good with words and matters of the heart ♥
As always this is beautiful and special
44....still such a random number. LOL
Random should have an 8 in them you know
Arithmetic of their resuscitated hearts
I suck at math but I am sometimes good with words and matters of the heart ♥
As always this is beautiful and special
2nd Mar 2023 10:09am
Maths is not my strong point. In my village, we have a large abacus that the elders sometimes let us use. It's next to the large bucket.
I write, because I must Lori. It's such a release.......
I write, because I must Lori. It's such a release.......
Anonymous
2nd Mar 2023 7:36pm
And you call ME incorrigible LOL wow 🤣
1st Mar 2023 12:09pm
2nd Mar 2023 10:01am
Hey! I made the charts. Lol. There was a time when they'd have just drawn from vodka from my veins. Appreciated PS.
1st Mar 2023 1:53pm
This line is amazing:
For everything sacred has been written
Shit. That was amazing in its context.
Love the defy the odds thing. I have a structure question : do you have each line capitalized as a preference? It makes a full stop on each line and I am just super nosey to know if that’s intentional 🙂
2nd Mar 2023 9:59am
Appreciate the kind comments Betty. Diolch.
Structure? Dunno to be honest. Guess it's from habit and mimicking my fave writers as an awkward teenager. There are probably conventional and accepted norms to these things. Interesting point.
Structure? Dunno to be honest. Guess it's from habit and mimicking my fave writers as an awkward teenager. There are probably conventional and accepted norms to these things. Interesting point.
1st Mar 2023 5:56pm
I love ethylene twilight I would make that the name of a collection of your poetry. When water loses her noise, when the rest is silence, as the bard said, we are left with the ghosts of those we loved. There is no point of reference in a void vacuum and, truly, there really is no such thing, only energies in their dances.
2nd Mar 2023 9:54am
At the risk of repeating myself my friend, you truly get the complexities and sensitivities of me. Thanks DC.
3rd Mar 2023 11:16am
I love your work Rob, have not read a poor effort yet.
Great word combinations... ethylene twilight is inspired.
I'm always teetering on the edge of full comprehension, which, dare I say, is where you don't mind the reader being. Offering a nice little challenge. But the over all theme usually hits me the face.
Enjoying your work.
Great word combinations... ethylene twilight is inspired.
I'm always teetering on the edge of full comprehension, which, dare I say, is where you don't mind the reader being. Offering a nice little challenge. But the over all theme usually hits me the face.
Enjoying your work.
4th Mar 2023 1:22pm
Very kind BITS. It is reciprocated. Just really enjoy writing, it offers escapism and is cathartic I guess.
