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I'm here if you want to talk
I am the vast
you can neither measure me or contain me
really nobody, no body
I am time infinite and vast
the dark you fear
I seek asylum in my space
you have no idea what is coming your way
spellbound you stumble
the Earth is alive and angry
vomiting hell on terrafirma
watch as an alienation=alien nation causes you internal damage
then leaves you in the clink for something you didn't do
I've seen it first hand and am astounded by your cruelty
son, it's over you're insane
you can neither measure me or contain me
really nobody, no body
I am time infinite and vast
the dark you fear
I seek asylum in my space
you have no idea what is coming your way
spellbound you stumble
the Earth is alive and angry
vomiting hell on terrafirma
watch as an alienation=alien nation causes you internal damage
then leaves you in the clink for something you didn't do
I've seen it first hand and am astounded by your cruelty
son, it's over you're insane
Published 3rd Feb 2023
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3rd Feb 2023 8:37pm
It's only fair to return the visit
and having read this a couple of times
I'm a bit nonplussed.
It is powerful no doubt but the word ' clink '
is a bit of a stumbling block it's a bit of a " ??? " moment
What's it doing here in something which seems
to be so " otherworldly" ?
And then " son, it's over..."
It's a bit like going to the cinema half way through the film. Yes?
Having no clue of what is happening until the film restarts from the beginning.
( does that still happen?)
Enigmatic is what it all is.
Perhaps I'm too far out of touch of such to understand?
Kind regards from Rew
and having read this a couple of times
I'm a bit nonplussed.
It is powerful no doubt but the word ' clink '
is a bit of a stumbling block it's a bit of a " ??? " moment
What's it doing here in something which seems
to be so " otherworldly" ?
And then " son, it's over..."
It's a bit like going to the cinema half way through the film. Yes?
Having no clue of what is happening until the film restarts from the beginning.
( does that still happen?)
Enigmatic is what it all is.
Perhaps I'm too far out of touch of such to understand?
Kind regards from Rew
3rd Feb 2023 11:35pm
to be fair a lot is metaphorical and subjective as all art is thank you for the review...
4th Feb 2023 8:24pm
Sorry about that crimsin but you have asked for honest stuff.
But, I should've read more of yours to get a better flavour rather than just picking one out. Sorry 🌹
But, I should've read more of yours to get a better flavour rather than just picking one out. Sorry 🌹
4th Feb 2023 5:15pm
I am infinite and vast
I seek asylum in my space
son, it's over you're insane
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
a little gem within your diamond
a warm smile
silent lotus
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I seek asylum in my space
son, it's over you're insane
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
a little gem within your diamond
a warm smile
silent lotus
`
5th Feb 2023 8:32am
"the Earth is alive and angry
vomiting hell on terrafirma"
I liked the way you stated this. Mystical and true.
vomiting hell on terrafirma"
I liked the way you stated this. Mystical and true.
