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Revelry
Come
One, and all
To the fabulous
Winter Wonderland
Snowflake Ball
Put on your dancing shoes
And your fancy dress
As you melt with the snowflakes
As you let go the stress
Then listen to the music
And the fabulous sound
As your hearts are lifted
By the love all around
Come hither, come hither
And set yourself free
As you dance the dance fandango
As you enjoy the revelry
by Jemia
One, and all
To the fabulous
Winter Wonderland
Snowflake Ball
Put on your dancing shoes
And your fancy dress
As you melt with the snowflakes
As you let go the stress
Then listen to the music
And the fabulous sound
As your hearts are lifted
By the love all around
Come hither, come hither
And set yourself free
As you dance the dance fandango
As you enjoy the revelry
by Jemia
Published 5th Dec 2022
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6th Dec 2022 6:15pm
Wonderful and bouncy. Almost story book.
Friendly feedback: get rid of as many unnecessary uses of 'the' and/or 'and' as you can to tighten things up.
Friendly feedback: get rid of as many unnecessary uses of 'the' and/or 'and' as you can to tighten things up.
