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all or nothing
increasingly so,
i've used writing
as a way to organise
my thoughts and feelings
about the malaise.
being shy,
my words have been
vague.
i hoped that they'd seem
more universal
but now i'm not sure.
does the inability to name
the thorn in my side
prevent me from reaching
anyone at all?
i've used writing
as a way to organise
my thoughts and feelings
about the malaise.
being shy,
my words have been
vague.
i hoped that they'd seem
more universal
but now i'm not sure.
does the inability to name
the thorn in my side
prevent me from reaching
anyone at all?
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Re. all or nothing
27th Nov 2022 8:45pm
It seems to me there's nothing more universal than malaise. Does it really matter which thorn is causing it, I wonder? We all have them. You're not alone. Keep writing!
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Re: Re. all or nothing
27th Nov 2022 8:47pm
True. I hope that people will know and feel that I'm alongside them, empathising, but wonder if the impact would be greater if I were less elusive about it. Maybe my writing appeals to the lowest common denominator at the moment. Part of me, of course, wants to feel understood... and I appreciate that I make that hard to do.
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Re: Re. all or nothing
27th Nov 2022 9:01pm
I want to be both personal and universal - to be vulnerable, but to speak to people in different situations to mine. I've just been musing on the fact that if I can't be more open, everyone could well be wandering in and out here nonplussed.
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Re: Re. all or nothing
27th Nov 2022 10:11pm
No, no... I want to empathise with as many hurting people as I can. Now or in future.
Re. all or nothing
28th Nov 2022 00:39am
The hardest part with empathy is protecting yourself. Putting yourself in someone else’s shoes is difficult, especially when they get trampled on. Keep writing dear poetess. Not only is it cathartic for self, the readership would be lost without you. My personal opinion from someone who writes what would be considered by some as just porn. Your poetry has touched me unmeasurable ways.
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Re: Re. all or nothing
29th Nov 2022 00:06am
Re. all or nothing
28th Nov 2022 2:37am
*initially I thought you were holding a hockey stick, or broomball stick. Lol. But, it dawned on me when I noticed the tip...
Sometimes I myself write in a form of private code. Metaphors are my disguise.
Yet, readers tend to take what they read towards their own direction a lot, which is a good thing too. We don't have to be too obvious or basic. We write for release first, and to be "caught" and appreciated second.
Your writes are fine. Guessing yourself is normal. It's called growth. Welcome to writing your guts out. Lol. We readers bring our own plates.
Sometimes I myself write in a form of private code. Metaphors are my disguise.
Yet, readers tend to take what they read towards their own direction a lot, which is a good thing too. We don't have to be too obvious or basic. We write for release first, and to be "caught" and appreciated second.
Your writes are fine. Guessing yourself is normal. It's called growth. Welcome to writing your guts out. Lol. We readers bring our own plates.
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Re: Re. all or nothing
29th Nov 2022 00:08am
I had dressed up as the Spelling Police for World Book Day at school.
You are very right. I would like to be more open, but reserved and cloaked in metaphors is fine too.
You are very right. I would like to be more open, but reserved and cloaked in metaphors is fine too.
Re. all or nothing
28th Nov 2022 6:10am
I hear you and know your pain. Not that I can ease your burden or like Androcles remove your thorn, yet maybe just knowing you're not alone will help. It is a beautiful poem for all it's sadness.
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Re: Re. all or nothing
29th Nov 2022 00:10am
Thank you. It means a lot. It's a common enough pain, but it's my pain and I suppose I don't shout about it. British thing. I always appreciate your writes and your feedback.
Re: Re. all or nothing
29th Nov 2022 1:39am
I'm the same way about pain, it's all mine and I'm not sharing. Funny how no one has every accused me of being selfish when I refuse to share this inner turmoil. Just call me Midas.
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Re. all or nothing
28th Nov 2022 7:00am
Poetry is everything...
There are no limitations,
save for those...
Within ourselves...
You have a very polished, cool
style, Ellie...
It is very effective...
And your "poetic eye" is such that
one cannot help but be drawn into the worlds you draw up with your words...
There are no limitations,
save for those...
Within ourselves...
You have a very polished, cool
style, Ellie...
It is very effective...
And your "poetic eye" is such that
one cannot help but be drawn into the worlds you draw up with your words...
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Re: Re. all or nothing
29th Nov 2022 00:13am
This is one of my favourite comments ever. Thank you so much. I really appreciate 'polished, cool style' and 'poetic eye'. Lovely! I must admit to being a but mystified at people who say edit, edit, edit... nah, doesn't work for me. I won't post anything here until I'm reasonably happy, and major edits are rare after that.
Love all of your work also.
Love all of your work also.
Re. all or nothing
28th Nov 2022 7:01am
Re: Re. all or nothing
29th Nov 2022 00:09am