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The Weeping Child
A shroud of clouds
obscures her colors
while a mute melody
plays in her mind,
clouds of time
converging to conceal
truth from her eyes,
her last shelter
frozen in fright.
Thus, an unseen mouth
convinces her
to drown in the ocean
of shadows
beyond the border
of reality,
where no hand
can reach
the weeping child
inside.
obscures her colors
while a mute melody
plays in her mind,
clouds of time
converging to conceal
truth from her eyes,
her last shelter
frozen in fright.
Thus, an unseen mouth
convinces her
to drown in the ocean
of shadows
beyond the border
of reality,
where no hand
can reach
the weeping child
inside.
Published 7th Oct 2022
Author's Note
This poem is not about myself nor anybody else. I have a definite idea of what it means but I'd love to hear your interpretations of it, hoping that it could have sparked feelings and ideas in your mind.
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7th Oct 2022 11:13am
Hello, welcome.
Well done!
I get the impression that a traumatic event was witnessed, causing remembrance of an earlier trauma, thus resulting in a bit of madness.
I would love to know the true meaning of this piece.
Well done!
I get the impression that a traumatic event was witnessed, causing remembrance of an earlier trauma, thus resulting in a bit of madness.
I would love to know the true meaning of this piece.
7th Oct 2022 1:37pm
Dear M,
Dark and meaningful right out of the gate. I concur with Her, I’m thinking of this as a past event. As an adult the “inner child” of this hero/heroine hasn’t quite dealt with the trauma and continue to live with consequences as they disappear further into that cloudy psychological abyss. It’s a terrifically intellectual and reflective write. I hope you’ll reveal your intended meaning behind this at some point. Meanwhile, welcome to DU.
H🌷
Dark and meaningful right out of the gate. I concur with Her, I’m thinking of this as a past event. As an adult the “inner child” of this hero/heroine hasn’t quite dealt with the trauma and continue to live with consequences as they disappear further into that cloudy psychological abyss. It’s a terrifically intellectual and reflective write. I hope you’ll reveal your intended meaning behind this at some point. Meanwhile, welcome to DU.
H🌷
7th Oct 2022 3:04pm
Hi! Thanks for the welcome!
I don't really mean to play mysterious or anything, but I will tell you what it means when more people will have commented, so nobody stumbles upon its meaning without the chance to come up with their own interpretation. However, I see what you both mean, and I had reached your conclusion after posting the poem. It was definitely an "oh gosh" moment. Thank you both so much for stopping by and leaving such thoughtful comments :)
Mundus
I don't really mean to play mysterious or anything, but I will tell you what it means when more people will have commented, so nobody stumbles upon its meaning without the chance to come up with their own interpretation. However, I see what you both mean, and I had reached your conclusion after posting the poem. It was definitely an "oh gosh" moment. Thank you both so much for stopping by and leaving such thoughtful comments :)
Mundus
8th Oct 2022 2:06am
I imagine a dream once held dear that has faded with time until only all that is left is a faint memory of the hope that once burned bright.
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- Edited 13th Nov 2022 6:45pm
9th Oct 2022 2:04pm
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Anonymous
12th Oct 2022 7:00am
All of your poetry is really well composed and detailed to portray a certain feeling. All hits! Keep up the good work. 👍
12th Oct 2022 9:56am
